"The way he is acting during this fight
makes my aching heart quiver."
i like this cuz it really shows how one sided we see things during a fight with someone we care about
"Looks and words presented so emptily.
Moments so cold, the stars shivered."
this was my favorite line cuz i know that feeling all to well and the sensation it brings is so wrought with undetected feelings it makes you sick wich you captured well in this poem in was short and to the point which some people prefer its all a matter of the reader its simply a glimpse at the night which kinda leaves you to play out the rest in your head but you did a great job!!
I absolutely love the title, that's what made me stop to take a look, but I think you could do some reworking in your lines, some of it seems forced and it didn't flow into the rhyme well. I like the basis, as it is a subject I think most of us can relate too, but the flow was off for me.
Its funny how easily "love" can just end and it happens so often. I never understood why people who argued so much and had nothing in common ever stayed together in the first place. Its almost as if couples just look for things to fight about. The poem was excellent and really described most relationships I believe. I thought the title was very interesting and unique and the flow within the poem was great as well. Nicely done 5/5