I love how different your piece was. I think a lot of people see spring as something mew and refreshing but you took it from a different angle and I liked that. Loved the flow of the entire piece and how well your owrds fell into place. Very nice work :) Nik
Cindy, this is a sad but beautiful rendition of the changing of seasons.It is however sadder to know that a special person no longer here to witness this change, but deep in your heart you know that he is watching and experiencing the same feeling as you do.
I enjoyed every stanza of this wonderful write.Good job.
I've been too slow getting 'round to commenting this poem and for that I apologise. I have read it three times now and finally have some time to myself to get some commenting done. I'd like to thank you for the supportive comments you leave upon my poems, they are muchly appreciated.
I adored the imagery of this poem and it truely brought me to spring Here we are in winter so it was lovely to have a fast forward, only with a different contrast, a different view from someone elses eyes.. however while reading I was etched with a painful feeling, and while I cannot comprehend your loss as I have never faced something like this, i felt the emotion behind your words and that is what grasped me with this poem.
This was just one of those poems that was bitter sweet, the sadness and the beauty combined together like a subtle contrast.
I think you did a wonderful job. Congrats on the weekly win.
With spring comes cruel sorrow
That you're no longer here
Darkness now entombs me
My thoughts painfully unclear
its my favorite stanza.. the very first line tells the reader that how sad this poem would be.. and than each line goes deep and deep in the world of sorrows where i saw my past people faces for a minute. its was such a nice feelings for me that i felt. once again you brought me in that world where i saw my love.
9 years ago
Damn.... this poem touch me truly a beautiful poem i can relate to this feeling 5/5
Wow! This poem is so beautifully written and I really love it... It's no wonder that you won, congratulations! You deserve it :) I love relating emotions to nature, and you've done that in a very calming way. My favorite stanza was the last:
Need love once more to waken
Nature's beauty all around
Filling souls again with warmth
Melting coldness that surrounds
Very heartbreaking poem, the level of despair so deeply expressed that anyone reading this can't help but be moved and feel what you're going through. The advent of spring cruelly indifferent your sadness. All of this so powerfully expressed. A beautiful poem.