Comments : The Path. [Invocation]

  • 14 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    I like how you poured out your honest feelings
    into this write..it was a touching read :)

  • 14 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    A plus! lol If I was your teacher you would get a one hundred. This was very well done. I've never had to do something like this, but I loved the idea and I'm glad you shared it with us. Very great poem dear :] Nik

  • 14 years ago

    by Jad

    Well, If I were your English teacher that would be a A+ but since I'm not I can tell you that you did a wonderful job. The poem flow right along and I really liked the way it's written as well. Good job and keep writing.

  • 14 years ago

    by Ingrid

    Very personal, passionate and mature write by you, Temps.

    When you know you are no longer focussed on what your goals used to be you have two options: one is to re- adjust them, second is to shake off all that has come between you and your dreams..either one will do, as long as it's well thought through.

    Well written, well worth my time:)

    God bless,

    5/5 Ingrid

  • 14 years ago

    by Sylvia

    You have captured the path of your life to this point very well. Good job.

  • 14 years ago

    by Melpomene

    Temps,

    I told you I was extremely impressed by this piece, not only because it was written using an interest of mine, being Greek mythology but rather form itself and the maturity you used throughout the poem. An Invocation is not the easiest thing to write, whole most people will say that they can write a prayer it isn't easy.. Especially with such depth that you used.

    I like the choice of the four muse, you picked for four I would of usedd aswell. I liked how you started off by asking Calliope for strength.. It was different because most would start with asking God. The only thing that I would of done differently with this piece was the fact that you said God. I would of kept with the mythology theme and perhaps instead of said God, would of Said, oh Zeus, or Hera or one of the Greek Gods names that fitted with what you were asking for.. You mention spreading your wings, so perhaps I would of said Zeus as he is God of the heaven and skies and would of fitted in well with the metaphor of a bird ect.. But that is just personal opinion and you got 20/20 for this anyway!

    I can't pick a favorite part of this because I believe it all flowed together, and without the rest it just wouldn't be right. It should all stay together because all of it is what made the poem wonderful.

    other than that this piece is written beautifully and I absolutely adored it. Well done for creating a mature, powerful and interesting poem.

    -Mel.

  • 14 years ago

    by Faithless

    Well even though you did this for your English assignment, I can feel the personal touch of you when you wrote that topic. I like how you penned down the discovery of your passion. Well no one says that you can only choose one. You can be a vet and also a poet/writer at the same time. I guess it's more of how we can juggle things at once. But I'm sure be it a vet or a poet you'll do just fine;)