Key

by AngelicDecadence   Jun 1, 2010


A safe, thats me.
Find the key.
You'll get a treat.
But you see,
i'm locked tight.

I'm also not a pretty sight.

Chipped and crushed,
from those who weren't
the right shape or size,
will you be the one,
to set me free?

Will you be my trustee?

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  • 13 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    Chipped and crushed,
    from those who weren't
    the right shape or size,

    *I think those few lines give this poem more depth and really made it real for me. I wouldn't say that I was locked up tight but I can relate to being chipped and crushed. I think you needed those few lines for people to see how badly you need the right person to come along and relase you. I also liked the last line. I think it was a clever way to end this piece. I agree with the people above me. A very short but well written piece. I wouldn't change anything about it. Nik*

  • 13 years ago

    by Shinobi

    Eventhough it was short, it had hidden many messages inside. The poem was of modern poetry, as the structure is unorginized. The two larger stanzas described you, the safe, and the second described the many times people tried to opened the safe, but only cracked and ruined it. I loved this poem. It showed how in life we always search for the one person who is a perfect fit, the one and only who could make us truly happy after a long time of suffering. This is a unique poem, and I would change nothing in it. A perfect 5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by Danielle

    I really liked how the last line from each stanza rhymed with the single line. This poem has a bouncy rhythm to it. Like, it seems like a longing poem, but it bounces...if that makes any sense.