Thank you for doing such a wonderful job telling this story for me. I will cherish it forever.

This is a beautiful poem. You did a great job telling this story. I am sorry for Sylvia's lost. It all flowed very smoothly except this spot:

Returned the love she gave to him, wasn't big on greed.

It just seemed a little forced to get the rhyme right.

But other than that it was great. I loved how strong your vocabulary was. It made your poem mature.

My favorite stanza was this one:

Tells herself everyday, she has the courage to walk away,
Will no longer postpone, be on her own, nothing left to say.
Cry for him just one more time, pack her bags and leave,
Easy for her to move on, when she's had this long to grieve.

The way you worded it was perfect and all the rhymes flowed so smoothly together. The message behind it was great :)

5/5

Karl
You did a wonderful job on this piece you compossed for Sylvia.
Excellent!
Take Care
Cindy

This is powerful and written in the style you have mastered. I am touched.

It was such a great poem and if you dont mind im going to use it to send to my girl friend

U blew my head off...i consider down voting a poem as gd as this . IS but a sign for how gd ur words been.

consider it a compliment when ever a poem is down voted lol..
cause this was just beautiful with its wording..flow..expressions..thoughts.. very very impressive to be in some one elses shoes and do this work

5/5

I've briefly flicked through a few of poems, and this one just stands out to me.
It is a bitter sweet situation, but the beauty of this work is magnificant.
I've dealt with grief similar and you have truely captured the emotions and battles.

It was a great read, and the structure and flow is impressive.

I look forward to working through your archive.

Well done