A little thought provoking I believe. Mind games can often do what you have written for us and I liked where you were coming from. Good job and keep writing.

This is thoughtful...really thoughtful

and ur opening lines
played a very strong roll

Drinking my own poison,
just so you can die.
Its mental masturbation,
believing my own lie.

>>really made me lift up my eyebrows ..

ur ending lines...made a bright conclusion
and i seriously loved how ur expressions been flowing..
not mentioning the rhythm which was not forced at all

i think this is a gr8 job
keep it up
5.5

This is such a strong and mind boggling write! Your first stanza drew me in and the imagery in each stanza is vivid..an excellent read.

Thank you all for reading and commenting. I certainly look forward to all your writes as well.