Autumn Jump (Haiku)

As skydivers Fall,
^I just love the very 1st line of this piece!
its really poetic and very original for me!

burnt from the Summer sun.
^^
simple and nice..
Thrill-seeking Leaves!
^^this line just gave me the chill...thrill seeking leaves ?!
this is too original for me as well... i just love the creativity in this poem..

wll done..indeed well done
5/5

Ahh this was super cute! I adore that last line. Really nice imagery. Great job! :)

As skydivers Fall,

burnt from the Summer sun.

Thrill-seeking Leaves!

I have noticed that the syllable counts were not the usual style everyone is fond of which is 5-7-5. Also, A haiku should be free of excessive usage of punctutions, each line should flow accordingly without the help of punctuations, one rules along with too many :) Also a haiku should present two juxtaposed parts in three lines where the last line should differ with the first two lines, I think you managed to create that, skydivers falling, and turned out to be "thrill seeking leaves" how creative!

However, personally I think you did a good job there. The subject was well portrayed, and it was amazing, you managed to capture that AHA moment.

They say it takes up years before one could master the haiku form. Personally, I tried to perfect them as well, but I found it hard to really create that AHA moment.

Good job!

If you are interested to read one of my haikus, here is the link

http://www.poems-and-quotes.com/nature/poems.php?id=1146820