Comments : Beautiful Mess.

  • 13 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Beautifully written, simple yet well-penned. The whole concept of a beautiful mess was portrayed deeply here, fascinating to ponder over.

    Take care dear.

  • 13 years ago

    by chind

    What a beautifully penned piece. That last stanza was very nicely penned, i loved it! A great ending to this piece. Nicely done, kudos!

  • 13 years ago

    by Jad

    A well done poem once again. Your talent never ceases to amaze me. The great imagery in this poem was very helpful as it gave nice incite to what was happening and also the feelings coming across this poem were very lovely as well. Good job and keep writing.

  • 13 years ago

    by Sunshine

    I just love this piece! but i have to comment later on , cause it deserves a real analysis..cause am not home now..but had to drop by and at least tell u
    that u worded it perfectly

  • 13 years ago

    by Beautiful Chaos

    I really enjoyed this, short and sweet, but not lacking, the only thing I could say was I am not sure you need "yet" in the second last line. Great job!

  • 13 years ago

    by Ingrid

    Did you repost this, Temps? I could swear I have read this before, and commented to it also, but lately I comment so much , it is hard to remember all facts.

    Anyway, this poem is great, I love how you made the reader see how difficult loving is in the long run, not just at the start when all is peaches and cream.

    I tangle myself
    into drama,
    like seaweed
    suppressing water,
    it strangles my
    mind; truth.

    ^^
    Interesting wording, strong metaphors.

    Good work,

    5/5 ingrid