A very powerful piece you've penned her Lu.

Raised by the sun
and fallen by the moon
^ Lol loved the contrast between the two.

Great stuff as always.

Can love be so easily
forgotten;
Raised by the sun
and fallen by the moon

This was my fave part Lu, but I love the whole piece, your word choice, description, all done nicely. Great work hun! It really spoke to me.

I liked it so much I voted for it to win the weekly contest. Good luck :)

"Then to hold words
of a fabulist
and feel the interior suffering
of this dying soul ..."
^'then' should be 'than' I believe, because of the comparison, and I do not believe 'to' is necessary here

"of a fabulist
and feel the interior suffering
of this dying soul ..."
^I think one period is sufficient. The thought has been completed.

If I were you I'd put a question mark after the last stanza, definitely provokes the reader to think! A very interesting write, full of creativity and definitely leaves the reader to ponder at the conclusion of the poem...Wonderful job

This poem has some very valid questions in it. I's say some choose to be a liar, and miss out on a worthy existence. I have also known people who had green gold stuffed where others hold people dear.

The ones who embrace love with all the tears and joy that come along with it are the lucky ones, in my opinion.

Well worded thoughts, Luanne

Great stuff from you:)

5/5 Ingrid

Can love be so easily
forgotten;
Raised by the sun
and fallen by the moon

Amazing lines lu! Very very well done,:)

Theres nothing left to say but 5/5

`d rather hold the tongue
of a dragon
and feel the exterior blaze
of melting flesh ...

Than to hold words
of a fabulist
and feel the interior suffering
of this dying soul ...

THose 2 verses says a lot, it portrays pain, anguish and sadness. A very deep write..congrats on the weekly win!

This is amazing and the piece itself, incredable. It is very carefully laid out and worded beautifully. I haven't read or enjoyed such a sincere piece in a long time. A well deserved win. Well done, fantastic job!!

Danika
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Congrats on a well deserved win Luanne :)
Love you
Cindy