Betrayal

Oh yes I agree with lu,the ending made great impact!! Bravo!

Remember when you loved me?
When your heart beat for me
One glance
And there was nothing but us
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This opening brings back the "remember when's" for me too.
How beautiful those " then's" were before they were "when's" *sighs*

Days that melted into nights
Nights that rendered into passion
Before we were found wanting
Before we spiraled into the void
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Here I feel the beginning of the sadness.
The beautiful days that melted in to yum yum nights.
Then BAM ... the emptiness sets in.

Oh the end was so beautiful
Words, thoughts, flesh
Bathed in a crimson glow
Of two hearts killed by deception
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This ending is definitely hard hitting.

The ending line WHAM !!! Like a suicide of the heart.

I am happy to see you back writing again Jenn. You definitely poured a lot of emotion into this one.
Very touching read !