A Final Dance

This is a truly beautiful piece. The flow is effortless and the language used is magical. My favourite line was "Passion choreographing our eternity" – really enjoyed this one.
I've been meaning to comment on one of your poems for a while - and glad I finally found the time :)

Beautiful, simply beautiful write! I Love the idea of this poem, it has a strong impact on the reader at first read. Knowing its the last day of life really changes a few things. Your last stanza was great, my favourite for it just tied the entire piece together, a perfect ending in my opinion!

"Whirling through chaos together
Passion choreographing our eternity"
- these two lines are very well crafted with lovely word choice, i like these two lines a great deal.

Overall, GREAT WORK! kudos!

This write is beautifully sad Jenn.
It holds so much beauty for the things that can be done ... but the things that were.

Whirling through chaos together
Passion choreographing our eternity
We did not need sun to shine
Just this

Gentle touches
True intentions
Synchronized souls
Loving simply, as they should

^^^
Love the ending !

Great read Jenn

:).......................
you have left me out of words..
this poem is sweetness it self..TENDER..passionate..descriptive and really coherent .
VERY strong wording and perfect word choice.

I love the feelings that i was able to relate to..and the ending was heartfelt.

Keep writing!

5/5