Losing The Will To Live

AAAAWWWW this is SO sad. I really like it. I seriously couldn't of put it better myself.

Life seems so pointless,

*I see this line too much simply because of the diction you used. Instead of saying pointless I would say "futile, or empty" another word with a stronger meaning then pointless*

Now you've been taken from me,

*This sounded awkward. I'd change it to "Now that you have been taken from me" that seems to flow into the next line better*

My get up and go has got up and gone,
*I like this line very clever and well done*

Now im depressed as you can see.

*Again here I've seen this line too many times. I would switch in another word for "depressed" something more powerful and more meaingful. "Now I'm tainted as you can see" something like that.*

Life seems so futile,

*lol well it would seem I told you to use that word earlier silly me, but it's okay if you repeat it though, it lets us know this person was very important to your life and that life does not mean the same thing without them.*

With you no longer by my side,
*eh this line was okay, not really powerful but I can't see a way to fix it either.*

How am I supposed to carry on,
With the hole in my heart so wide.

*I like this part it showed some depth which is what this piece needs.*

Life seems so empty,

*I'd put the life seems futile line here*

And I shall be empty no more,

*this was confusing. Is life empty or are you empty?*

By the time the ambulance gets here,
I'll be lying dead on the floor.

*Well that was depressing :( but it's a good turn, wasn't expecting that.*

My life is now over,
And empty I will no longer be,
For in this Ghostly word i've found my girl,
Together for eternity.

*I like the last stanza just the way it is, just fix the i in "i've" to a capital one and you'll be good. Sorry if I sounded harsh I just think you have talent you just need to make stronger choices. Try a free verse poem, sometimes rhyme holds people back. Nice read though, keep it up. Nik*