Your images are awesome
emotions laced in beauty

I am way too impressed by this piece. Perhaps I am jealous. That would make more sense. Enough about me, let's get to this wonderful poem you have written. I have found the description to be incredible and it is almost as if I could see all this happening. I love the word choice you use during this poem as it makes the lines more descriptive and adds clarity. The flow of the poem was good and I found it to be to my liking.

In all I saw this poem as the picture you tried to write off of. You hit many wonderful details and also added some of your won creativity to the piece. One last thing is the emotion in the poem. A sense of awe hits me when reading and I am sure it does for anyone else after reading this. Great job and keep writing.

Sylvia , this is breathtaking . Fabulous poem. Very coherent. Extremely descriptive, and TRULY inspiring.

Naked, bare, a mere tree stands waiting
as the sun sets, bringing a moonless night,
^^I found this just fantastic, especially when I had a look
over the image. This is incredibly said,
Makes it soo romantic, so silent and reveals
your ability of drawing by words.

brimming with darkness of understanding
and the oceans cry.
^^I felt that this was sooo deep, and romantic.
A bit sad, and truly peaceful.

Time passes as night blooms and
inside the meaning of ourselves spirits rejoice,
^^^this is soothing..sooooottthhhinnggg;
and just joyful. the lines got this you know positive
mood. Like fresh air

for tomorrow her lips will wake the sleeping city,
and young lovers will breathe the child of desire.
^^what I love the most about these two lines,
is the STRONG connection between it and the
image if the town. And then how her lips will wake the
sleeping city, this is EXTREMELY creaaatiiiveee..NEW..
ORIGINAL..and very very inspiring.

OKAY wont copy the last lines so you don't have to read much
and tire you, but that ending had these poetic, special
expressions, that ARE new for my eyes. I have
felt this inspiration at the end of your poem. the title is
very catchy, the poem is strongly structured and the
lines are flowing in a very admirable way.
Well done and good luck for the weekly contest.

>worth a front page/indeed.
In the valley of disorder, shadows will sing,
apathy will permeate minds void of thoughts,
thoughts that should bring joy for another
day and another sunset.

Sylvia
What a beautiful piece. Your imagery and word choices are great. Your words brought such a awesome image to the minds eye I didn't even need to see the image you wrote for.
Excellent job!
Love Cindy

Love this piece by you Sylvia.. especially the opening lines...

"Naked, bare, a mere tree stands waiting
as the sun sets, bringing a moonless night"

You did a brilliant job with the image and brought such a lot of emotion with the piece.

Very Well Done! :)

This is one of your most beautiful writes Sylvia.
I felt i was in this.

A beautiful poem! So much expressed here brilliantly!

Naked, bare, a mere tree stands waiting
as the sun sets, bringing a moonless night

This is one of the finest starting i have read in long long time. This one is really creative and so beautifully written, loved your choice of words.

all the best and take care

Reading this poem gave me the full picture
that there was no need to see the actual picture itself to understand it. I liked your
choice of words and the images you have created..well done!

"Naked, bare, a mere tree stands waiting
as the sun sets, bringing a moonless night,
brimming with darkness of understanding
and the oceans cry".

You almost pull me in the picture when i read the start of this poem. I wish i have such a creative mind like your's.

"Time passes as night blooms and
inside the meaning of ourselves spirits rejoice,
for tomorrow her lips will wake the sleeping city,
and young lovers will breathe the child of desire.
In the valley of disorder, shadows will sing,
apathy will permeate minds void of thoughts,
thoughts that should bring joy for another
day and another sunset".

Oh my, this says so much. I like the delightful mood it gives to the mind. Very well done as usual. Simple the best, keep it up, kel.

Amazing portrait of perfection, Sylvia.
Sorry, I hadn't had time to read your poems in a while.
This one was really amazing; I'm speechless besides the word amazing and perfect.
5/5

I think you did really well with creating an image inside the readers head. I loved the poem from the opening lines to to last lines.

Thank you for posting up the link so that I could see the pictures

5/5

I genuinely got chills when my eyes finished this poem. Nuff said :)

Randy

What beauty you brought to us in form of a poem. It brought back a lot of memories that I alone carry with me. Well done awesome write

Wow its a great piece