Another great poem that I find very emotional and more then that if one reads in between the lines. I can say this poem is really good with its message and the way you describe everything is great. The flow is smooth just like all of your poems. You express yourself well in this poem and also your emotions.

In all a wonderfully sad poem with a sad message in the lines. Great description and also a good way to release ones emotions. great job and keep writing.

You have grown so much as a poet Temps! I remember when you first started out...anyway.

I feel like this was missing something. It didn't reach a climax for me, but not all poems do...I felt like this one should though. I don't know if that made sense but yeah that's what I was left feeling. Like I wanted more..it felt as if you had a lot to say but didn't know how to get it out there. There were so many directions you could have taken this in, it felt unfinished. The title didn't really fit with what I thought you wanted to get across in the poem. Because I didn't see the "test of strength" anywhere in the poem. Maybe you did and I missed it.

I liked the format. The short lines and cutting of sentences was quite effective in creating drama and suspense. The emotion was there, I could find myself feeling for this person. Your word choice was great and not forced.

"to tug on your heart strings
persistently,... "
^although this was a bit cliche, I loved it. The way you formatted this was great because it put emphasis on emotion.

I really like this. I love the first 2 lines... really got my attention and drew me in straight away. I agree with Britt that it could be a bit longer - give it a bit of meat between the bread (more explanation into the situation so the reader knows more depth).

I really liked the flow of the poem too.

This is a wonderful poem! You express yourself so beautifully. I really connected with the image of wanting to 'tug on someone's heartstrings... just to see.'

I would have to say that I think the poem is great just as it is--it may be short, but thats because it doesn't need anything else to complete it. Trying to make it longer would lessen the impact of your images.

I honestly loved the length of your piece, I felt it was this trapped thought that is finally tugging free with hesitation and question marks flying away. Great emotion and the way you formatted your words was perfect, I felt like the emphasis and flow when reading was so natural, I just couldn't be pulled away. Thank you for sharing.

MA

I love the subtle mystery of this poem, how it leaves the reader wanting more, where they close, was it a distance of thought. I love a poem that makes me think.