I love how you portray innocence as a weak girl in the world who keeps believing in faith....how it grows passionately....her pain will someday end when she finds truth given to her.

My only suggestion would be to not capitalize the first letter of every word. Just the beginning of each line maybe?

Keep writing, this was a simple yet delicately woven piece that raised many questions....those lost voices in the world who are searching for something more than blind faith.

God bless!

I like how you spelled out the story but also kept something from it, then lead us to the end with the ultimate reveal.

I have to say aesthetically, I would not capitalize every letter. It gave an "amateur" feel and it's not grammatically correct :) Make look a little easier on the eye to your readers as well :)

"She Hold's On Tight. "

Hold's should be holds.. it doesn't need the apostrophe :)

Overall this is a very good poem with a lot of emotion and feeling. Something that is definitely easily related to for any age, we've all been there whether we're teenagers or old maids! Lol. Beautifully done.

"Wont" should be "Won't" with an apostroph! :)

a beautiful piece that says so much :) keep writing.

Brilliant..so much has already been said..this is by far my best of ur poems..great work jessi

I liked this one very much, and it really conveys a great deal of emotions. I especially liked the first stanza, and how it flows.

I'll mirror what others have said - I would refrain from capatlizing every first letter. Also, you misspelled "believing" in the first stanza.

Keep writing!

Awww such a sad poem yet still a good read

5/5