Well written verse on a real life story. The ability to express oneself in poetry is a gift and certainly admirable for all poets who write sincerely. The finesse will come as one writes more and more. Congratulations on a simple and heartfelt write.

A little choppy in the core focus, the rhythm and rhyme was off just enough to make me re-read some of the stanza's, not all,, BUT! Over all I think this is great being your first poem! I started out writing like this, part story/part poem. It's a great way to express underlying emotions. One thing I really liked is this stanza:
"I am really sorry baby,
I do not want you to suffer
Or make me leaving so much tougher
One day you'll forgive me, maybe."
It's not so much what was said, but the way you twisted the rhyme up this way: A-B-B-A. VERY nice use of rhyme there!
You definitely have a talent for poetry, keep at it! As a writer of ten years, can I give you one bit of advice? ALWAYS edit after your done, even if you think it's perfect. To the point of obsession. The mark of an artist is that his/her work is never quite perfect enough.
Great piece!

I really enjoyed it...as for me I simply just write from the heart.

I really felt that somewhere deep inside me, like yourself i am new to writing but i have to say that was so so moving you should definatly write more :-)

Kindest Regards

Wow i felt my heart sink to his note to you very well written the emotion was so well described

For a first poem outstanding you made it your own and showed your feelings clearly really good 5/5

Hard to believe it was your first, the rhymes are good and it transmits a lot of emotions 5/5

Your first ws better than mine,thats wat i can say..i love how your emotions flow and how you relate the stanzs togethers...5/5

I liked this poem. It was a good read and easy to understand. The wording was good and the flow was ok.

Gave it a 5/5

I really like the flow of this poem! I liked how you repeated Did i love you from the start it displays the constant thoughts that play in your mind :) I like how you entwined all the emotions of love even the heart break that comes with it when he broke up with you out of the blue... I believe love is so deep and so is this write!
You well deserve my 5/5 :)

Hi Jenni :)
I decided to see what your first poem was like and this is it huh. You have grown alot since this one although its a great first poem. Some places rhymed some didn't but still your emotions shine thru beautifully. I am looking forward to reading you more. take care ~Lostlove1