Sunshine flower,

For a short piece this had an emotional impact on me. It's different for me to see you writing a poem in such a way but I adored it. I liked the simplicity of your words, it works with the simplicity of your tone and therefore your concept. It was almost as though you were talking to me in an every day conversation, poetically of course but none the less it was elegantly strung together. I found this to be thought-provoking, I understood what it was you were saying but my mind lingered on the last two lines.

A suggestion, I would change "So I don't know what would I reminisce" to "So I don't know what I would reminisce" It just seems to flow better when those two words are placed in opposite order.

A lovely little read.
-Mel.

Nana, even when you shorten a poem to only a breath long the impact of the message still hits me hard and it soaks in to impress your emotions on my heart for me to feel as if I am indeed this person who is not happy.

Your simplicity as already stated above in the first comment is wonderful and it makes it so much easier to relate to. You have a solemn attitude throughout the poem and I really like how so many people can relate to your words. The last part(stanza?) was the part I liked the best. It flowed so smoothly and kept a steady pace and the rhyming, intentional, went with that ending part really well and did not seem forced at all!

In all, I liked how you shorten your poem drastically from what you normally write. It made the poem have more of a lethal dose of sadness as you compress it all into a few lines. You have a very mature writing style and I love how sadness and pain is always overpowering in your pieces. Brings the poem to life for me. Great job and keep writing!

There's so much emotion packed into your words here, lots of meaning also. To me it feels like you used to be something with this person but now you're not. You both never used to be happy maybe with each other or literally never happy and always sad in general as individuals, and now you look for what was missing which never allowed the both of you to be happy, or with each other. There's nothing you'd necessarily miss because you were never happy, how can you miss something that makes you sad?

Your words have great meaning in them,
well done.

I Love this read ... Really, The sad feeling in this poem is intense and concentrated in the few words you placed here.

It feels like it is a dark nostalgic thought that led you towards a sort of revelation of why are you feeling nostalgic in the first place.

It's more like a missing part
rather than a part that I miss!

These two lines I find really deep ... Loved them :))

Well thanks to you :P

Note: this was a chat with Mohamed, talking about something.. it was not supposed to be a poem, but I thought I went bit poetic there..and wanted to keep what I said..so posted it!

So much said within these short lines.
It was moving.. heartfelt.. enjoyable!
Well done!

It's funny how conversations with people end up being a bit more poetic than we intend, isn't it? This is the perfect example of that. I think it's short, which is unlike your work, BUT it has so much of that emotion that you carry within each word you write, no matter what poem it is :)

It's like missing the familiarity more than anything, what's usual to you. I understand that completely!