I'll nominate this for now..

I'll tell you why and comment honestly tomorrow.
cz I have no time now,, i should watch my fav series :p

Lol

But THIS IS FANTASTICCCCCCCCCCCCCC
5/5

!!!

Oooooooooooooooooooooohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh
myyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy
goooooooooooooooooooooooooossssssssssssh

ohh dear .....
this writ is awesome and it better win ORRR grrrrrrrrrrrr
bagh duh HMMMMMM
HOOOOOO
oh lala
what am i reading????

Meme, this was the best piece EVER EVER written by you,greattttttttttttt work

nominated the next week FOR SURE!

What happened in September dear?

such a sad piece. though simple but awesome.. i always like this kind of poetry.. i want you should have some more. because i was enjoying but it ends... wonderful piece of writing Girl :).

this time very 1st stanza is my favorite stanza..

Oh how I used to wait for you,
my sweet September
How I flipped my calendar pages,
hoping at a glimpse you'll arrive
Carrying that warm breeze within
your days, and that soft gentle wind
that wrappes your nights ..

i like the ideas and thoughts. in your writing. true feelings...

OKAY..
This piece is unique and not only does it fit under the category of 'sadness & depression', but also it fits under the bitter-rage atmosphere..
I like how you used 'September' as if talking about a lover..
The depth in here is so enticing.. and the structure is tight giving way to flawless conveying of vivid images..
Contradicting thoughts – and this is a method which I favor – were used in an awesome way.
“Oh how I used to wait for you,
my sweet September”..
^ Oh – this word as if sighing, or shouting, or crying, I don’t know.. contradicting, as I mentioned.. followed by HOW is just so alluring! It’s great as an opening.
^ ‘Sweet’.. I think here it is sarcasm, as if it foreshadows the end!

“that rappes your nights ..”
^ not sure that ‘rappes’ is written like that..
I think you mean ‘wraps’

“you capture the kid within me
Drawing a childish smile
on a face that was abandoned
by happiness grace ..”
^ I think this is my favorite part so far..
^but, ‘happiness grace’? – It’s wrong :p .. Happiness AND grace would work better, right?

“Why have I lost the sensation of
the joy that filled your sunny days”
^ Add a question mark at the end
“All you bring me now is a heartache
of all the memories I no longer have
I struggle to remember the pictures
I used to take when you come around
Now all I see is a blur, a wrinkled memory
of my life ..”
^ What I love about this is the neat structure – as I said previously – connecting the Bright September to the dark one.. And in here you’re paving the way to the awfulness of September
^ an additional, small suggestion: you can replace ‘wrinkled’ with ‘vague’ or ‘distorted’.. because you used this word beneath ‘drew wrinkles instead’.. I think it’s better, but if u wanna keep it, it wouldn’t affect much the rhythm :p

“You wiped the smile from my face and drew”
^ from should be ‘off’

“drew
wrinkles instead, reflecting all the years
I spent waiting for you.
How can I bid you farewell, when
you were once my September ..”
^ OH GOD.. I adore the ending!!! You penned an epic finale to an awesome poem!!!!
^ Instead of the two dots‘..’ you should put a question mark ‘?’
^ The bitter-sweet emotions were well displayed.. and I can imagine every verse you’ve written.. It feels so alive, so pure, so straight from the heart, heart-felt, and most important: flowing! AND well.. the last two verses can take us again to the first two verses.. I love such turning points at the end.
Though you hold a grudge against September, we all love it , right ;) ?
+ ‘upon’ in the title should be capitalized :D
^ Speaking of the title, it is fantastic! The usage of ‘Once Upon’ is so beautiful! BEAUTIFUL!
It’s defo one of my fave poems, and one of my nominated precious pieces!
All in all, this is amazing!!!

I feel this poem is worth a win! D-E-F-I-N-I-T-E-L-Y
EXCELLENT ;)
Keep up writing replicas of this piece!!:D

^ why did these symbols appear??!!

^ I'll send you my comment as a message.
It has suggestions and precious stuff :p

aww! what the.. ?

This has got to be one of your finest work dear
The emotion you've pinned is breath taking, I also encourage you to keep writing with this style. It sure does suit you.

Omggggggggggggg
this is ART how come this did not win!
I am touched, and am in tears i have to be honest, i relate 100 %
about every single emotion...reminds me of my Saddest things about April!
different month, same grief..same bitterness..

i love how u poured ur heart over here, its just touchy!
amazingly honest and heartfelt
i love your work Meme.. i love it so much

5/5

I was not expecting the ending yet it made the poem all the more interesting