I love how you play with words, twist and bend them to say the most beautiful or heart breaking things.
This is among my favorites, it had a peacefulness and a deep sadness. You're so talented.
Connie

I agree, the wording was exceptional, pure talent, great imagery. Much more than I could ever achieve.
Good luck in the contest Jen, You nailed it sweetie.
love,
Tara

Great poem Jenn, as usual 5/5

You ROCKED this contest, do you hear me??? you rocked it! nominated the next week, will come back with a longer comment tomorrow, wait me! I am a very lazy beeeeeeeee :P

Its not my fav but it was written very well i agree wth connie i loved how u played with the words o talented

The imagery, the choice of words..all brilliant..you will definately win it

This, Jenni, has taken every possible comment I had for it originally away. I have nothing left except that if this doesn't win, I'll be amazed! Because this poem is... is... WOW!! In the most fabulous way.

I enjoyed reading this poem. The wording was great and got your message a point. It is a nice length and a good read.

"her cracked soul, trying to
merge with it and it reveals a
sincere mourning that
causes her to writhe."

maybe try

"her cracked soul,
trying to merge with it
as it reveals a sincere mourning
that causes her to writhe"

5/5

Delicate and fabolous composition with a lot of twist, peppered with a ardent opulence of romantic and sad diction.