by MissIce Sep 9, 2011
category :
Sadness, depression /
lost relationships
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The end |
by BlueJay
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Wow this is amazing! I love the use of emotion that you use here. There is a nice flow, and a great word choice. Your descriptions and lines were very basic, and didn't really fit the piece as well as they could have. The beginning was cool, the ending was pretty nice; so good job there. Overall I would have to give this a 4/5, which I did. Though welcome to the site, and in time I'm sure you will be so much better then you ever thought you could be. |