This is cuuuuuuttttee:) I love it 5/5:)

Hassan, this is creative, the sad tone was felt throughout the entire poem, I loved some lines, and especially the green stuff of brunches part, I loved it. You've nailed it and I want to read it again, one of your best stuff ever. :)

The title was eye-catching, couldn't help but open this piece and read till the end, however, I have for you some suggestions, some little tiny things to say. :)

i have to make friendship with Cold breeze

^^^

"making friendship"?
I would say:

I have to befriend the cold breeze.

Maybe it will be better for the meaning and the flow, right? :)
And another thing, I believe you should capitalize your "i" unless you have a purpose of letting it a small letter.

Other than this, the write was enjoyable.
Good job. :)

I agree with poetess

I suggest you to take poetess^s suggestions, i have some but cant go on details before?monday, as i said from phone...however this is very sad, emotional, very creative and i love that you ryhmed it...an excellent poem with some editions, so afteer aaallll this time not writing..BE PROUD

Wow the people before me have said the majority of what I was thinking. But they failed to point out that your length was nice, your word choice was wonderful, and your presence is very clear in this piece. There is a but of a flow, which is nice. The story is sweet and sad. Your beginning is strong, your end is even more so. I love this piece and think it most definatly is worth a 5/5

Wow... Took my breath away very good poem I loved it and terrific wording very nice and I enjoyed reading it :) :) 5/5

Everyone Has Pretty Much Said IT All.
Overall This Is A Beautiful Poem.
Great Job.
5/5
-Jessi:)