Comments : A soul's winter

  • 12 years ago

    by Liliana

    Beneath frozen land
    vitality and hope concentrate,
    melting the ice in order that
    spirited plants may arise
    this is my favorite of all, and I really got captivaded by the title, you penned a really great poem :)

  • 12 years ago

    by Ms Happiness

    WoooW:) I really love this poem:)

    Bad weeds grow tall
    but have confidence
    in these buds,
    they will blossom
    and reveal your dreams.

    This is my fav stanza:) keep the perfect work:) hahaha:)

  • 12 years ago

    by BlueJay

    Jenni, always you write such magnificent poems, but this one is even more amazing then most. You have imagery, description, emotion, and a purpose all at once. Your choice of words was really nice, and I think that only improved the piece. Your flow is well written. You start off barely saying a thing and then you slowly say what needed to be said. Your title was amazing. Great job.

  • 12 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    I loved the ending!! Full of hope.
    A really good piece here, some awesome imagery, with good flow and simple words with meaning

    lovely Jen
    love
    Tara
    x

  • 12 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    This was such a breathtaking piece, it was so easy to love and enchant because of the example your words gave me- the hope, how we don't have to hide beneath our souls and that cold weather that can take us under. Original and unique, you say so much that has this incredible purpose- relating winter to our souls, flowing into one grand last thought. That we are capable of overcoming winter and letting serenity warm us.

    Beautifully written Jenni!
    Take care XD

  • 12 years ago

    by Kips2.0

    I love this part the most:

    Sacrifice your credulity,
    draw hope from this melody
    and know that you overcome
    souls winter.

    Sacrificing credulity is often necessary, because many people tend to lose hope fairly quickly. Lovely and witty piece. 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Joseph Boadi

    Diction perfectly penned.ideas well expressed,imagery totally captivating nd flows uninterruptedly.gud piece

  • 12 years ago

    by Exostosis

    I tried but couldn't pick a favorite stanza. Absolute brilliancy.

  • 12 years ago

    by lOsT sOuL

    This poem is Amazing.... i had never thought that i would ever get a chance to read poem like this... it's great.. words full of hope and courage... :):) i loved it .every single words touches my heart... it flows so silently...and smoothly...

    Whenever a heart
    bursts asunder
    a noxious drop falls
    and unseals our
    souls winter.

    Now snow conceals
    the dull medley of
    feelings and damps
    the sounds so that
    serenity may comfort us.

    Beneath frozen land
    vitality and hope concentrate,
    melting the ice in order that
    spirited plants may arise.

    Bad weeds grow tall,
    but have confidence
    in these buds,
    they will blossom
    and reveal your dreams.

    Sacrifice your credulity,
    draw hope from this melody
    and know that you overcome
    souls winter.

    It's has so much power.. which shows a light of hope ... no matter what happen, no matter what you are going through... there is still hope of everything getting better.... :):) i loved it ..:):) it's going in my favorite..:):) 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by TJ Arizona Eagle

    I won't drag on this comment so I will just add "nominated" Best poem of the day

  • 12 years ago

    by Cinnamonspice

    Ah Jenni you did it again Nominated :-)

  • 12 years ago

    by A lonely soul

    A beautifully worded play of words concealed in wintry emotions. Each stanza is unique and touching. Certainly, deserving of a nomination.

  • 12 years ago

    by Decayed

    Jenni! I was looking for this!! :p

    Of course it's awesome, my opinion !!!

  • 12 years ago

    by Renegade Angel

    Very lovely piece, i like how you captured its essence.

  • 12 years ago

    by Brittany C

    I liked it. You got your point across. The wording was good and it was a good length.

    gave it a 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by The Queen

    I saw this piece earned nominations but I have something to point, and I hope you won't mind me posting this.

    A souls winter by Jenni

    ^ A soul's winter/Souls Winter

    and unseals our
    souls winter.

    ^souls' winter.

    credulity,
    ^ I love this word though, totally fits with the theme of this piece.

    I loved the clarity in this piece, from the line formation and its vocab. Keep it up!

  • 12 years ago

    by Jenna Bella Oldridge

    There was something musical about this. It felt like I was reading lyrics. I found this poem to be different yet likeable.

    5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Jess

    This is a breathtaking poem, I dont know how you mannage to captivating me jsut by reading a few words. Thats the affect of poetry, and you have a great grasp on this. You have talent in general, and you portrayed your talent through this poem.
    Great Work.
    5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by xoxShorteexox

    Amazingly penned with beautiful imagery fitting the poem.

    5/5

    -Heather