Hidden darkness...

by Matthew Schut   Sep 27, 2011


Tears fall so suddenly
Angels weep of the lost soul
So much more to live
The burning pain took its toll

Nights filled with hatred
Days were broken and torn
Thoughts of suicide erupted
Wishing to have never been born

Running from satan's torture
Screaming for strength to move on
Blood poured from his heart
Of every word he would think upon

No one took the time to ask
Why he had a blood stained arm
People ran from his presence
Fearing that he could harm

With blood on his hands
And knives in his back
The demons were around him
Ready to viciously attack

With blood pouring down
Tears in his eyes
He took his life tonight
And left with no goodbyes...

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  • 13 years ago

    by xoxShorteexox

    Wow... Very, very, very powerful and revealing into core feelings.... Very well written and emotionally expressive.

    5/5

    - Shining Star!!

  • 13 years ago

    by xoxShorteexox

    Wow... Very, very, very powerful and revealing into core feelings.... Very well written and emotionally expressive.

    5/5

    - Shining Star!!

  • 14 years ago

    by BlueJay

    Dang, this is wonderful!! It has a great use of imagery, thanks to the excellent word choice. Great job on the flow. The story is there and so is the emotion, though I think there could be a stronger voice...

    With blood on his hands
    And knives in his back
    The demons were around him
    Ready to viciously attack

    This ^^ is my favorite stanza. It is so clear and it has something about it that is different then the others, yet it helps create a cohesive piece.

    5/5 from me

  • 14 years ago

    by Innocent Fairy

    Wow great poem,towards the end i wanted to cry...
    No one took the time to ask
    Why he had a blood stained arm
    People ran from his presence
    Fearing that he could harm

    With blood pouring down
    Tears in his eyes
    He took his life tonight
    And left with no goodbyes...
    -very sad and u worded this poem good i really liked it and enjoyed reading the poem fantastic job :) 5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by believeinlove87

    I LOVE this(:

    Its different then your usual but very good!
    It flows perfectly, you can see the hatred burning through in your mind. You can feel the agonizing pain.

    With blood on his hands
    And knives in his back
    The demons were around him
    Ready to viciously attack
    -this is one of my favs :)
    strong words!

    Amazing Job
    5/5

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