I love the tone set here, soft yet distant, the emotion obvious, the thought of new beginnings yet raw memories, love and guilt.

This flowed pefectly from start to finish.
Your essence capturing my mind with imagery.

A well penned piece I found a joy to read

love,
Tara
xx

This is one of ur best writings:)

Never did I expect my favorite
blanket to lose its threads or
even leave me dangling on a string,
but I shouldn't hold on to what
used to be.
^^^
my fav stanza:) a 5/5 from me:)

This is one of ur best writings:)

Never did I expect my favorite
blanket to lose its threads or
even leave me dangling on a string,
but I shouldn't hold on to what
used to be.
^^^
my fav stanza:) a 5/5 from me:)

These deceitful smiles the sun
sends down to me every morning,
leave me crestfallen, but I'll revive felicity.

my favorite of all :)

the imagery of this is realy good 5/5

Wow! pretty cool.

My favorite part. . .

Is this a new beginning..
Or should I just start sewing
and enjoy my reveries?

Yet again you have penned a stunning piece. Excellent job.

A nice work with a certianly eye catching title. Nice vocab. The stanza which appealed most was:

These deceitful smiles the sun
sends down to me every morning,
leave me crestfallen, but I'll revive felicity.

Nominated too!

I also have some comments (leave it to your discretion:

1) This stanza seems to have a little grammatical minor error to fix perhaps:

Amidst falling leaves
you're dancing, my pace slows down
and your (?with) ease filled movements

2) It seems to me that the last 3 lines of stanza 3 really should be in stanza 4?

3) Stanza 6 could be more appealing if split in half... first 4 lines separated in another stand alone stanza.

4) The last stanza could carry a lot more punch if you add another line to it.. ex.

Is this a new beginning..
a new love rising amongst fallen leaves
Or should I just start sewing
and stay in my reveries?

Just my thoughts. The writer knows her thoughts the best. So ignore everything if you do not see the same way as I do.

Hugs:)

I really enjoyed this one a lot. It's hope and love and nature all rolled into one brilliant poem. Hugs girl it's awesome

Every stanza was well put and I was engossed from start to end

5/5

One of the bests writes I've read in a while. The opening stanza was beautiful. 5/5

mandy :)

Jenni, sometimes, I know not what to comment, I know not whether I shall praise you or thank you for such a read, you at times sweep me off my feet until I find not a word to express my feelings, this was really great, not simple I know and I had to use a dictionary which isn't usual for me, but you put one or two complicated words that made me dislike the flow YET, the message behind your words was absolutely amazing, I enjoyed it so much, plus, I think you are improving as a writer, if you compare between your first submitted pieces and this one you will know what I mean by this. ;)
I hope you will always outdo yourself, very proud of you, darling.

This is the first poem I have read of your but definitely wont be the last. The very first stanza pulled me in-it flowed great to me and
I am sure it stands a very good chance in the contest. Loved the title, perfect for the season. Loved the comparison of the tattered blanket/relationship. You are a fantastic writer. Good Luck!

Really Really enjoyed this poem, it had a gentle feel to it, but the emotion was quite prominent. I am conflicted with the last stanza though
"Is this a new beginning..
a new love rising amongst fallen leaves" I love the simplicity of this

but

I found the next two lines after that seemed forced and didn't seem to really close up the poem the way it deserved. Other than that. Good job

Wow! Jenni! I'm speechless... this poem is so beautiful and was such a joy to read!! I loved the title, it caught my eye! There's something about fall and all the leaves scattered around... I think I also loved the fact that where I am in the world, it is fall and there are leaves absolutely everywhere!

I think your choice of words were beautiful and perfect.. you told a lovely story.. and I loved the comparisons to falling leaves.. the ending was hopeful but still mysterious!

Amazing poem dear!!! =D

"This wicked atmosphere
reminds me of my wistful
memories and resurrects
abandoned wishes."

Those lines... are so...beautifully penned; they really left me speechless on how well this poem has been written, Jenni.

5/5

-Heather

'Amidst the fallen leaves'..a very interesting title you chosed ...loved the write from first to last