TJ, this is absolutely beautiful. This is the true emotion that two people who meet, become friends and begin to fall in love feel. There doesn't have to be fireworks, this is the best. Reading this makes me smile and makes me feel good. Well done.
Wow! TJ, this poem is so beautiful! I loved every word... it was so romantic and sweet... I could relate and I got chills, because I imagined I was there, experiencing the same thing. I loved how the title is "No Fireworks" and you refrained from the cliche of stating how it was like fireworks or butterflies when you first met this person. It just made me feel very happy and in a lovey-dovey mood! I loved it!!! Great job :) 5/5
Wow i love the way this poem flows and it's fantasticly worded an amazing poem :) i loved it poetic butterfly ;) and the title mended well with what u wrote :) it's a sweet, cute poem waiting to explode and show ur caring very well :)
There was no fireworks or springtime bouquets.
No birds started singing on this winters day.
A darkened sky, with no clouds full of dreams.
There was no magic or romantic schemes.
<3 this is my favorite stanza
Just a genuine smile from a beautiful face.
My heart didn't stop nor start to race.
Yet this attraction I felt I couldn't explain,
I smiled each time when saying your name.
Your touch wasn't electric just soft and warm,
soothing the static of an on going storm.
Words stuck in my throat wanting you to stay.
Meeting by chance as the days went by.
My happiness soared, emotions did fly.
Bonded in friendship nothing extreme.
You've awakened my heart allowing me to dream.
<3 i loved these lots too
heehe kinda the whole poem but the entire poem was my favorite and everythins was so wonderfuly great :) :) 10/10
It is the start of a blooming love that knows for sure what the heart wants/likes. A lovely warm read.
9 years ago
Why I find it so hard to comment you I have no clue.lol but this piece shines not only in poetic value but also in the message it portrays...Sounds like you found a great friend-maybe more. Write on my friend!
Alright so here is the comment that I had promised.
I have to admit that I didn't expect the poem to be leading into that direction because of the negatian in the title, but I'm actually glad it turned out to be a positive poem.
The first stanza actually confirms my original thought, but I like it that way because it kept me interested and I'm always up for surprises, if you know what I mean. I absolutely loved the second stanza because it shows how the speaker appreciates the simple things about the person he is refering too, which means much more than "extras". I really like how the speaker stays down to earth and is realistic, doesn't interprete too much into what's happening, nor fears things that aren't there; he just enjoys the moment for what it is.
Overall I really loved your choice of words because the simplicity underlines your message very well. The fact that this rhymed made it even better. I do not think I even have to say anything about the emotions in this poem.
Such a heart warming piece. Simple, yet it perfectly portrays ones feelings. .I cannot think of anything more to write because simplicity at times is the hardest to describe. . But it indeed made me smile to read what you heart is murmuring.
How sweet! :D You're rhyming skills got me climbing hills, lol.
This piece consists of four identically constructed stanzas, each line made me nod quitely in recognition of its depth and beauty.
Awesome as always!
9 years ago
I must say, from the title, I had no idea what this was going to be about. In the end, I am so glad I read it because it is absolutely amazing. The flow is wonderful, the length of the piece is nice, the word choice is terrific, and emotion is quite strong. What seems to be your voice in this piece is clear and well spoken. Once again, this is a magnificent piece. If I had any votes left I would nominate this.
I welcome you back. I enjoyed the story told here. I think the reading could have been a bit smoother as in places the word choice caused me to stumble(IMO). I believe if a smoother read this would be one of the best I've read in a long time.
"I felt" to perhaps feeling
"wanting" to wishing (??)
"allowing" to allowed