I'm staring at you, looking around
I call out your name you don't hear a sound
I look in your eyes but nothing is clear
You look straight through me like I'm not here

^ This is the best stanza for me.
It flows without a single flaw :)

The rhyming scheme is just raw and amazing. It had me thinking a lot, and it also inspired me :)

And the end.. remarkable.

I absolutely agree with Abed.
I would just recommend you to think of a different title because it doesn't seem to fit too well in my opinion. I like the powerful and pure emotions you portray and the ending was stunnung.

The time has come to say goodbye
You can't see the tears that fall from my eye
As the gates open all I can do is stare
How can I go to heaven when you're still down there?

^Again this just ended the poem so well, the flow was perfect

Throughout this I saw some sadness, and some strong emotion, which was really well penned.

Once again, remove the capital letters and would look so much nicer and add in some comma's.

You did a lovely job once again, a pleasure to read

love
Tara
xx

I'm nominating this<3

Love love love it!
Amazing Tony :)

How I would love to hold you tight
And tell you "I love you" every single night
To see the stars reflect, off your eyes
To share together the beauty of every sun rise
-This shows just how much you love her & how you want to spend your life with her.

The time has come to say goodbye
You can't see the tears that fall from my eye
As the gates open all I can do is stare
How can I go to heaven when you're still down there?
-My favorite of all stanza :). The pain you feel having to leave without her shows. Overwhelming emotion.

This poem is my favorite :).
It flowed magically & the emotion was so strong you could feel it deep down in your soul :)
Deserve better then a 5 :)

You've done a superb job with this poem. The emotional affect is one of complete sorrow, and tender devotion. The end surprised me as I expected it to be different. Great write bro

If anyone knows me they know I am a sucker for love poetry, especially a good rhyming one...So you have hit the nail on the head with this one friend. Nice job :) Continue penning!

Must admit you caught me off guard with the twist at the end. Thought is was like my problem where she simply just didn't feel the same. XD excellent job.

The time has come to say goodbye
You can't see the tears that fall from my eye
As the gates open all I can do is stare
How can I go to heaven when you're still down there?

My favorite, so sweet and heart-breaking 5/5

The last stanza blew me away. It's a love poem of eternal passion. Loved each word, every emotional moment. Excellent Tony

Connie

How I would love to hold you tight
And tell you "I love you" every single night
To see the stars reflect, off your eyes
To share together the beauty of every sun rise

Wow... This stanza is my favorite... The words are well chosen and the flow is matchless... The best part of this poem is that the emotions are well balanced and neatly presented... Keep up the great work... 5/5

Karan

Oh my gosh i went through that and the poem is sooo good!

I love this one too:)

I'm staring at you, looking around
I call out your name you don't hear a sound
I look in your eyes but nothing is clear
You look straight through me like I'm not here

^^^
I agree, this is the best stanza.
A 5 from me:)

This poem is amazing. I enjoy the simplicity in context along with your flow. It definitely kept my attention throughout, and your bittersweet ending was really touching. Great write :)

Out of the two new poems I read by you, I think this one is my favorite. It's truly sad, and you can feel the longing and sadness through the words and voice of the poem. Ultimately the last stanza was my favorite it ties the whole poem together, and the last line is the most tragic out of the whole poem.

A few comments on things that I think could be improved though, the only rhyming that I thought was a little off was when you tried to rhyme "hips" with "kiss" they don't quite fit when the rest of the poem rhymes so well. I also felt the line "move in close and feel the taste of your kiss" could be reworded a little better. the word choice felt offf because "taste" and "feeling" are 2 different senses. To feel the taste of someones kiss doesn't quite make sense. You can feel their kiss in the sense of their lips pressed to yours, or you can taste their kiss such as the taste of their skin, or mouth, using your tongue to experience all the flavors of that person, but I feel you need to use a verb more related to the sense you want to describe, such as "move in close and savour the taste of your kiss" or you your fix the rhyme at the same time and go with:

"I wish I could put my hands on your hips,
Move in close and feel the touch of your lips"

it's up to you how you want to go about it. Nicely written though. I enjoyed the read.

I always admire your rhyming skills and the simplicity in your every piece. I myself I dont think I'll be able to write such piece of beautiful feelings and emotions without being too complicated with my diction.

Good work!

Very nice and gave emotion and insight. i loved it. ;)

Such a powerful poem and the ending was absolutely perfect!

Aww this is amazing

I love it 5/5 :)

I am speechless... I adore this poem. You don't read many that are from the point of view as the person passing... always the person missing the person that passed. I love every single line!