Although at first read, this sounds like a sweet love poem, it really isn't. The female has swept someone off their feet and in the end breaks their heart and had done it as quietly as the wind blows through. Well done.

Sylvia said it all.

Shes like the wind, her entrance is enchanting, mystical, penetrating ones soul and her departure cataclysmic, leaving behind a void, a cavity which cannot be filled.

If I have only one vote left, I'd right away nominate this, I'm sorry for being too fast with nominating, lol, it's still Tuesday! haha

Okay, so now, I have a confession, this can put all of my poetry to a shame, it hit me to the core, I loved the metaphors, and I guess if this gets nominated then for sure a winner, however I don't care about the weekly contest or ...whatever it is called, I think this is a winner, just in my humble opinion.

Loved it so so so much, TJ. Feel proud to write such a piece. ;)

Love. Take Care.

Wow. This is amazing. The description is stunning, the emotion is fantastic, but the best element of all in my opinion (for this piece anyway) is the word choice. There is a voice here that really portrays the story with all the right touches. I think this is one of the best pieces I have seen in a while, by far my favorite on this site so far. 5/5 for sure.

Damage absolute she moves on,
leaving behind ruins of passion
broken branches of forever. Hunger
fed, leaving behind an empty vessel.
---------"she's like the wind"
^^ This is a fabulous ending to such an excellent piece, but this is also my favorite stanza in this.

That song is one of my all time favorites. Allthough he did not sing so well, Patrick had a huge succes with this song and rightfully so:)

I like how you describe falling for this girl in the poem, how it felt like winds blew open the door to your heart. Locked doors are trickery, while they keep unwanted guests out, they also keep you away from all that makes life worthwhile. So it's a good thing that wind has opened the lock;)

Well done,

5/5 Ingrid

It's strange, but after I posted my comment, I read the other comments and then reread the poem..somehow I did not truly see what you wrote in the last part, or maybe I did not want to see it.

Anyway, TJ, it is better to have a heart that feels( open doors), and to run the risk of having it broken, than to be a lonely hermit for the rest of your life!

I hope you are doing well!

Ingrid

TJ, high five.

This is really like a stormy night with blowing winds and empowering swishes... your words.

I like the emphasis on every idea using strong words and flawless imagery.

Great job,

.This was most painful to read, the end wasn't what I expected. You penned it with emotional precision .
Connie

Leaving behind ruins of passion
broken branches of forever.
^^
This line says so much. I loved the words used in this poem. Simply perfect.

Boom!! This is poerty i loved it deep meanings beautiful words perfect flow. ... Amazing. .. Well penned indeed

tony

Like a mystery woman who captures your heart and flees leaving behind a beautiful picture of her..sweet and passionate!

Such a beautiful poem full of love. Strong in the words you have used, great job. Warmed my heart. Thanks for commenting mine. 5/5

This is certainly a very nice work, as evident from all the comments above. Metaphorical comparison of a love lost (torrent winds/whirlwind) tearing a heart open and then moving on to leave the damage behind in the form of "broken branches of forever" (a broken heart) or restated another way "leaving behind an empty vessel", is ingenious.

I would wonder if the 3rd stanza would look more effective if reworded as :

Torrent winds tease my skin
with sensual promises
Blowing open the locked doors
to my heart.

And some rewordings to the 4th stanza to give power to your thoughts:

Emotions undone, laid free to scatter
like brittle shed leaves in the fall
Caught up in a whirlwind then thrown down scattered remains of what once was green
turning to dust trampled by feet on the ground

This is one of the more impressive write's this week. And I disagree with Sylvia, there is definite originality in this poem, a rendition from a broken heart, a story narrated with the power of a poet's golden pen.

Great work friend. A worthy nomination indeed.

I can picture everything in my head as I read this poem.

Very powerful, it reads to me like a love story

Damage absolute she moves on,
leaving behind ruins of passion
broken branches of forever. Hunger
fed, leaving behind an empty vessel.
---------"she's like the wind"

^^^^^^
I feel as though it's a painful love story where so much damage has been done. I love this stanza - my favourite part.

It's like she's hurt this person forever and left him with nothing. She's taken everything of him and it's going to effect him for his future love because he has nothing left to give.

I love this poem

x

Wow this poem is so descriptive, I could picture your words which I think is amazing. The words themselves painted a bitter sweet picture that I loved! I intend to read more of your work. Thank you so much for sharing!

Ooooh. I like this. Very playful with the imagery, and just...amazing. The flow was great. :) Your words are beautiful.
5/5

Great poem, very sad but it's the realities of many people. Love offers a summer breeze, but it more like torrent winds when it leaves. Well written I enjoy reading this piece.

An absolutely beautiful write. I loved the beginning stanza. 5/5 =)

I love this song... but your poem definitely gives that song a different light in my eyes that I can really interpret the song differently after reading this. Which is actually something I thought I'd never do.

5/5

-Heather