Comments : Wisemen

  • 12 years ago

    by Saerelune

    Its interesting to see this bond between father and son. Its not something you find very often because it takes a lot of understanding and respect to be "one". I took this as some sort of synchronity between the life of the man and the life of his son. As if they will both go through the same things. I truly like the.gentle and serene approach here. And the way you truly.put the word "alone" alone. Emphasizing the importance of the man and his son witnessing the sunrise together.

  • 12 years ago

    by Yakari Gabriel

    I totally get why this piece is on the front page,
    it was most definitely worthy of it.

    I love how you can pull out perfectly
    how the son feels about his father
    without it being cheesy...

    the poem hits all the "factors"
    one would look for in poetry ..in my opinion
    Great metaphors, great flow..

    amazing simplicity
    and most of all...
    props for describing something so powerful
    in such a short piece,

    which makes me want to read again and again,
    only because it is so refreshing and not so eye-tiring like some pieces..that go on and on and on ..and make you go ...blahhhh...

    I don't know who you are,
    and its the first time really I see
    your work,I apologize..
    I hope to see more of you around,
    and I hope others start to notice you..

    because this truly is something.

  • 12 years ago

    by Yakari Gabriel

    Mm,I'm sorry..now I look at your profile I see you have been around for quite a while...

    so I guess,I'm the silly one that never
    came around -.-
    but hey,atleast I found you!

    Still,I think your poetry is underrated!
    you are sooooo good.

  • 12 years ago

    by Karla

    Perfect piece.Loved it.

  • 12 years ago

    by The Queen

    Congrats, Alba!

    Way to go and keep making us proud!

    *hugs*

  • 12 years ago

    by Saerelune

    Congrats Alba, a very well-deserved win!

    Now keep writing and sharing the magic. =p

  • 12 years ago

    by Edward D Zurovec

    Baby Doll, this is an excellent reading.

    Astute and aware, he stood.
    glaring at the morning sun;
    no man had ever witnessed
    such power before.

    Petals lay twisted in his aged palm,
    seeds of an ancient flower
    that could never reach bloom.

    Son, a man of many ages now,
    stood by his side, with a kind of grace
    even angels find hard to flourish;

    -Masters of their Soul
    -Together realising,

    Life is but one Story.
    The idea they failed to attain
    alone!

  • 12 years ago

    by Edward D Zurovec

    Peace and Blessings