Comments : Twenty-One

  • 11 years ago

    by The Queen

    Holy mole in a hole, I think I'm in love, yes, I'm in love with this poem!

    *shakes head*

  • 11 years ago

    by Yakari Gabriel

    I think I'm inlove too myryn...

  • 11 years ago

    by The Queen

    Yay! So glad I wasnt alone. hahaha.

  • 11 years ago

    by Hellon

    I really enjoyed this one and I'm glad I have just regained my SM status so I can nominate it.

    To me this told the mundane life of a person living in a mundane city. It's so very typical of how life is for some in UK/Ireland where a walk to the shops for the morning paper or cigs seems to be the highlight of their day. Mrs...So and So will be walking her dog as you pass while Mr Whatshisname will be there on the corner as usual and give you his usual morning greeting. Sometimes you will take the longer route just to avoid them and see if something different is in the next street...it seldom is.

    I found the idea of 21 cigs in a pack very ironic at the end. I think your suggesting that...if there was then perhaps you would be able to delay your morning outing to sit and enjoy that 21st cig. before you have to start the inevitable all over again.

  • 11 years ago

    by Decayed

    I don't know.. I think I really liked the whole picture of a city in my mind. It kind of reminds me of Adele's HomeTown Glory.

    Maybe your style, Colm, shows so much flawlessness, too.

    All the details and actions of people (your journey, too) make your piece alive enough especially with the sharp notice of yours to small details that to me, have a great effect on volume of ideas.

    At any level, the 21 idea... mmm.. interesting, I like the interpretation of Hellon.

    But, also... does it reflect age? I mean being a twenty one guy, soon.. I don't know. my thought only..

    Anyway, I really love this.

  • 11 years ago

    by Decayed

    SO WELL-DESERVED Colm :)

    Congrats.

  • 11 years ago

    by Karla

    I always like what you write.It is a pleasure to read your poems.

  • 11 years ago

    by xoxShorteexox

    Well-deserved win on this poem. The detail and the imagery that plays on my mind when I read every line was astonishing... Superb job.
    5/5

    -Heather