Seasons of December

by Lioness   Nov 22, 2011


Asphalt;
melting by the swealtering heat
Cars -
slowing down in peril
Summer winds trigger -
my winter cravings

Horizon;
glistened atmosphere
Polluted by excess energy -
rising from dwellings
consumed by all

Blistering skin
Ruby followed by Chocolate
Refreshed by the ocean -
envied by the fair

Beaming children
scamper with haste -
to where the music is played -
and where their dreams come true

With golden coins
held tight in their sweaty palms -
they reach over in delight
and say

"One Ice cream cone with spwinkles pwease"

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  • 12 years ago

    by BlueJay

    So much has already been said, but this piece is amazingly vivid and a fun read. Though I have friends all over the world I always forget some are opposites of where I am. December has many different meanings to everyone. Yeah I am a tad bit envious too, but I am glad you are enjoying days like the one depicted here. Excellent job. 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Jenni

    I can tell you right away that there is nothing that I do not like about this poem.
    I think that the title is really interesting as it is, definately eye-catching and it fits to this write like no other.
    Now to the poem itself: I think that the first stanza portrays a vivid image, which gave me an idea what this might be about, I have to admit that I didn't expect it to end the way it did though, it was positvely surprising though.
    I do not know whether you did it purposely, but I like the fact that the first two stanzas start with one word, while the third and fourth have two words in the first verse and the fifth stanza three words. It is obvious that you wanted the reader to pause, especially in the first two stanza and you allowed him to let it take effect on him, eventually imagine something. I wouldn't say that you add to the imagination, but that you create an own image, that's different than what one would think of when first reading the word itself.
    Furthermore your choice of words is really nice, they simply flow into another and work very well together and the end? - memorable and magnificent.

  • 12 years ago

    by Ms Happiness

    Amazing :) ofc a 5/5
    And ur goin to my Fav list :D

  • 12 years ago

    by Hellon

    There was so much going on in this poem..from the melting asphalt, to the blistering skin...I thought this person must surely be walking around my garden because you described what is going on out there today so very well....then I checked your profile and....sure enough you're in Australia!!!

    I loved the ending, little kids following the tune of the ice cream van with their sweatly little hands and....the little lisp just made me go Awwwwwe. Loved it.

  • 12 years ago

    by Innocent Fairy

    Amazing it's always great ur poems the very reason ur a fav on my list :) and btw nominated cuz I loved it and it's amazing and greatly worded fantastic job 5/5

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