I have to read it a few times to understand it.Perhaps emerge and recover sounds like there could be an alternative ending.I like it.I feel i am drowning sometimes, drowning in life.Nice poem,it hits the spot for me.

First, the title interested me. I like that you use a range of vocabulary, and I like the words "maelstorm" "vertiginously" ... it made the poem stronger and more interesting.

This poem was simple yet powerful... the few words made me feel like this whirlwind or maelstorm was happening, and you can barely speak any words because of the catastrophe.

And I like the idea of 'perhaps' emerge and recover at the end, how you lose yourself in words and thoughts, and don't know where or what you'll end up with.

Interesting poem, and this is different than your usual ones.

Well done! :)

I love this poem. The title is perfect for the poem and it captured me

Oh so many times I have felt like I was drowning - with work and life. Especially with work

While reading this I actually took a breath as for me the idea of drowning is one of my fears.

I'd imagine being at the beach again getting caught in waves and then going under. Coming up for air and hoping that I would be saved. Wondering if it was going to be my last breath

I have to say I also took the last few lines in another way. The idea of going under water and then emerging as if to recover like being cleansed from your worries - as if to be baptized.

Awesome poem

x

Your wording made this a powerful and impressive poem. Though short it held an impact of talent.
Very creative, easy flow, and a good read
Great job my friend xx

Such a powerful piece you've penned here.

This is a rambling one, as many were, about acting with courage from your heart and spirit to overcome obstacles and this life's limitations but conveyed in a poetic and one of a kind way. This poem represents one's quest to survive and most importantly, braveness.

"Therin" - I think you meant 'therein'?

Overall, It's a great piece :)

Jenni I love this poem! The comparison you used in your first like was really interesting.
I also liked the use of vertinguously! That definitely was my favorite part and I agree different vocab makes poetry strong!
Great write!

You just have a way with words and its cleary visible in this piece. Just a few lines but with great meaning.

Jenni, you've done a wonderful job here, and I think that this is the best thing I've read from you. I love the whole idea behind that, and how far you went with the wording, structure and of course... the brilliant figurative language used.:)

Another beauty by... DUN DUN DUN... Jenni! Haha. Sorry, I couldn't resist. Anyway, that was beautiful; I loved the flow of the poem. It really seemed to just...touch me with beautiful imagery and extraordinary emotions.

5/5

-Heather

Oh I absolutely love this. I do this same thing all of the time! D: The simile 'like a drowning man' seems pretty dead-on to me. Anyway, this is a wonderful poem. :) 5/5

I believe you left no room for improvement here I would feel inudated if I had to