Oh what a lovely image!!! I love what you have done with the word Scuttle as if they are going from one side to another. Also the words rolled down. Rolled going to the side and down going down lol brilliant.

I love it when the words imitate what they are saying.

Awesome!!!

x

Lonely Rider, you are talent and I love the shape, but oh well... it's nothing compared to your figurative language.

The intro is one heck of a powerful stanza:

Fireflies melt
into moon-eyed shadows
howling lullabies
of nocturne,

^ Fireflies melt... what an enchanting image.
into moon eyed shadows... it feels like their light is dimming, or is it the opposite? :P

And the words 'howling' with 'nocturne' gives some melody. superb:)

This piece is filled with colors and sounds. It feels ALIVE :) awesome

What a majestic piece, beautifully written. Your choice of words always amazes me, great write as always.

all the best and take care

Raj :)
this was a great poem. I loved the format, it was a beautifully laid out piece. Your wording was beautiful. It's always my pleasure to read your work

A lovely picture of nature you have drawn with words bringing it to life! I also like the way you have formatted this write. An enjoyable read about nature!!

Oh what a beautiful and elegant piece.... very pretty~

Hi

Love this new style, free in form even well written
BR
Ole

Yes,I can imagine that scene..."Into moon-eyed shadows,gurgling fountains,a blueberry sky..!
WoW that was wonderful,holds the essence of nature,the beauty !
N'joyed reading..Appericiated !!

Another beautiful nature poem, painting nature's beauty of the night sky in all its splendor. Stylish, creative and eye-catching, with a lot of appeal to the nature enthusiast.
Undeniably, an eye-catching opening stanza:
Fireflies melt
into moon-eyed shadows
howling lullabies
of nocturne,

Fireflies that melt (=disappear) in moon eyed shadows, with "howling" in a forest, captured as "lullabies" of "nocturne'" (=a beautiful nightscene) is amazingly worded and captures the sounds and sights of a night in a forest, beautifully for the reader. Lastly, the last 2 stanza's capturing the beauty of the night sky in Greek mythology, are superb:
The woods were lovely,
once,

when the night
R
..O
....L
.....L
......E
.......D

D
O
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a blueberry sky,
while Venus kissed
gurgling fountains,
and Sirius picked
wild mushrooms.

A visually pleasing effect ^ "rolled down" as if a curtain was lifted of a theater screen from the night sky, revealing the color of a "blueberry", seems so original and lovely. Venus kissing gurgling fountains reminds me of the extraordinary Palazzo Venus Fountain, in Rome, which features the Goddess of Love with water trickling down from her pitcher and encircling fountains from below her feet, mesmerizing to the visitor. But Sirius, the 2 headed hunting dog of Orion, picking mushrooms (since when did he become vegetarian? )...that one had me laughing all the way! I guess, in a poet's eyes anything is possible :) A heavenly poem that caught my "nature" eye this week.

(From Judging comment 2-12-12 & 2-19-12)

Hello there,

i love this one. specially the title..verry catchy..as if i am wandering in the forest.....but in the end theres a piece missing.. the closing line..i don't mean to offend you, just saying my thought..but its beautiful... keep on writing and inspiring... :)

voted 5/5 for this one

Gel