Comments : My Final Goodbye

  • 7 years ago

    by Autuumnbree

    Sad but well written. I really like how you expressed your pains in this poem, my favorite stranz is "Please tell me why you carry on without me? " This question tells the readers how lost and confuse you are without her. Excellent way to express how you feel, good job.

  • 7 years ago

    by Ole Carsten

    Hi

    It is a strong poem, descriping the hard emotions of a break, i understand that
    You made that part clear.
    I would to know more of unsaid, the relationship and the deep stuff.
    Some women and men are flower jumpers, like a bee, a little nectare here or there, It dosen't matter for them

  • 7 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    Ezio-

    Sometimes when a person writes, those feelings have to pour out...like a raging river....I felt the sadness...the feelings of broken hearts and it really moved me... There was a time where I felt this same pain....it was a dark time for me... keep on writing...letting it all out... it will get better...this piece really got to me.... thank you for sharing this with us...

  • 7 years ago

    by TJ Arizona Eagle

    I was flooded by the sadness and the rage that sleeps silently within the words Each of us has been there at some point making this powerful indeed for all.
    Excellent flow, perfect wording..

  • 7 years ago

    by Rand

    So sad who did this to you
    it really happened right?

  • 7 years ago

    by Ms Happiness

    Sadness is felt through out the poem:)
    Great poem

  • 7 years ago

    by *emmax*

    I feel you man, I realy do!deep

  • 7 years ago

    by DarkShadows

    Sad..but i feel you.cuz im in a similar situation too... but great poem... =)

  • 7 years ago

    by Half Husband Half father

    Loved ur imagination, d start is good dat u saw a girl who is similar to ur gf, den u started d story u didnt tell d whole thing or u cn say some lines could b added here to make it more strong bt ny ways its a good poem 5/5

  • 7 years ago

    by DirgeVenustas

    Sad, but crudely written. i saw no stanzas, or rhyme scheme here. its full of emotion but doesn't fair well next to a poem. this was more like a letter. maybe you could try rhyming and putting it into stanzas. it was good however. a lot of sad emotion pouring out of this. good job

  • 7 years ago

    by Domino0792

    Beautiful and haunting poem. I think everyone can relate to this feeling in one way or another. Keep writing, ill keep writing.

    P.S. I have a 2m high painting of Ezio hanging in my house. Best video games ever. :)

  • 7 years ago

    by Jump from Life

    Sweetie, I only wish I was there for you sooner....

    I really feel the emotion, the sadness, the pain, the anger... I love it

  • 7 years ago

    by marina14

    Damn sad shit:[sorry

  • 7 years ago

    by Odin Ebbesen

    Scary od and good

  • 7 years ago

    by Odin Ebbesen

    Scary od and good

  • 7 years ago

    by Faith Ann

    :( that was a sad and meaningful but beautiful poemm! 5/5 :)

  • 7 years ago

    by Kitty Kurse

    Aw, so sad and filled with emotion

    5/5

  • 7 years ago

    by anonymous

    Dangg!!! that is deep..i can relate.! i love this poem!