Asphyxia

I always wonder how you put such strong but assimilative words together, forming an intriguing topic. It conveys; the subjects is dwelling in an unending woe. You're narrating a bitter experience of how events took on a troubling turn and seems the subject is responsible for his or her plight. You portrayed this dark topic in such a breath-taking form. A pathetic; in the sense that it arouses pity towards the subject but an awesome read overall. You're terrific Aunt Karla, stay blessed. Cheers! :-).

This poem is just so sinisterly wonderful. Oh, Karla, this is a masterpiece - as are all your poems of course!

I didn't understand all of the words, I need more time but I sure love the tone of this piece.

Your life has become
a ctonic rite and I can only
see you drowning
in waters of yesterday.
And while you solidify
nothingness, breathing
a lie, she cries in
my trembling hands
Again.

---This part to me sounds like realize something, don't you see it? Wake up.. I really enjoy it.

Amazing dark poem:)
Excellent job:)

This is a really good poem. I loved how you wrote this and the affect it had on me.

5/5