Nice, I can envision it, but two things. I don't like the title. I just don't.
Annnnnd I don't feel all the line breaks are necessary.

Besides that, lovelyyyy, mah dear. Except I'm sick so smoke and rain and all that isn't too appealing tonight! Ha.

Write more.

I don't either! But I don't like making titles. Any suggestions for a new one?

Rain and kisses

Kisses and the rain

Rain and other things

The silly things we do

Okay sorry, x0x0

Nice well written poem!I loved it!

Steven!

I like this. Short, sweet, to the point. It sounds like your poetry is becoming very sentimental.

You could call it 'The River'

Nooooo sentimentality! That's not the goal, but you're probably right. I was feeling very lovey dovey. I had to reign myself in from adding in things like "ohhhmygosh i just love you SO MUCH XOXOX!"

Don't like the new title, haha! Storm? Not very sensual or refering to love. Ugh. Call it... Hmmm...

I like the new title. I like the images it stirs... hidden meaning? I think so.

Storms might be raging above your heads, but you're safe in your cozy sanctuary of love <3

How about sensual rainstorms or sensual storms....just more matching to the content, loved it, warm and fuzzy, dripping..oozing with love.
A rainy day is probably the most romantic day, in my opinion.
Your poetry really warms cold hearts.

"ohhhmygosh i just love you SO MUCH XOXOX!"

omg that's sounds like something I'd say.. AHAHAAHA

I've read this piece quite a few times already,
it really is captivating,
in my head I picture these two lovers, not really playing in the rain, more like trying to hide from it, but they keep feeling the raindrops fall on their skin.

to make a love poem that doesn't sound cheesy at all, is really such a tricky thing

I don't think people realize how hard it is.

you on the other hand, well.. your sybs

what else is there to say...

Dem gais.

I thought this was a really neat poem. I liked the metaphors you put here. It really brought the imagery to life. Nice write. :)

I don't know. I just feel she is way more creative. I just dislike it.

New title: "Oozing with Love." : )

Just make the title XOXO

Xoxo is the perfect one, haha.