Obituary

I loved the contrast between the simple title and the profound poem. The repetition of "even if for once" was great because it emphasized the message. Your poem had me questioning if April was a person or if the month is just a bad time for you therefore you personified it with death. Either way, it was brilliant! You packed so much emotion in such a short piece, but I wasn't left hungry at the end...which is good! Very satisfying poem to read even though it culminated in a mysterious way. I loved the imagery of jasmines and wrinkled flesh because they are so different from one another. Jasmine represents a young spirit for me while wrinkled flesh shows age. This was just brilliant, can't say anything more than that.

Wow great poem!
it gave me chills to read this :]
5/5

loved it!

Woah!
This poem moved me. I am deeply saddened by the words especially with the title as well. The whole idea of obituary's and autopsy rooms.

I don't know if I could ever go to a morgue and have to identify a family member. I think it would tear my heart to pieces, like this poem.

Your poem reminds me of the people that have passed away. It is amazing how much thoughts can come into your head from a small poem. The words, are moving and completely heartbreaking.

An awesome write of course but one that has touched me dearly.

x

Gees!!!!! Im loving that people in our club or so freaking talented. You took a sad story, something that hurts your heart, and can turn it into a beautiful heart wrenching poem...

Seriously. very creative lines when talking about an autopsy. I just loved that part! Very well done hun and sorry about your loss.

As they all said Wow !
I kept reading it over and over again, a true creative masterpiece !
fabulous work !