I don't know if this is some club challenge, and you were restricted to use this specific number of lines... but...

I advise you to expand this little piece into a larger poem, for I find it original and clicking with my taste :P

Your title may not do anything to others, but I find it quite magical... and totally related to your content.

The 1st part was great for starters, and the 2nd was unexpected... I don't know if I'm supposed to smile... but I did since there is some self sarcasm going on... probably you meant you cannot keep that 'promise' and having an 'excuse' in the 2nd part by sarcastically saying you cannot hold that person=love poems.

Lovely!

Wow, I love the brevity here...it really surprised me and I really don't know what to say other than I think you took this one thought and really grabbed the reader here. I like the shortness, it's unexpecting yet there's still a certain pull to it. Love poems to me are such a blissful and romantic declaration of that love- and when you later remember you can't hold them it makes me think because it's already gone, or they are just too intangible. That some part of you has been untouched by that love.

Great write :)

Wow wow wow... Moonlight Muses, wtf is happening!? Sorry...but to many lovely poems this week from you.

Nominated, sure it wins!

Wow wow wow... Moonlight Muses, wtf is happening!? Sorry...but to many lovely poems this week from you.

Nominated, sure it wins!

The beauty of this poem lies in how short yet deep it is :) Great piece.

Write on~

I adore this write. I find it hard to write short poems and whenever I read some.. they seem unfinished, lacking. This however, is flawless.