by Mello193 Oct 15, 2012
category :
Sadness, depression /
grieving, loss
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Her eyes were the color of faraway love |
by Rusheena
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This is beautiful and tragic. I love the metaphors and the repetition. It made your story eerie, even though the imagery in the first stanza and most of second suggested otherwise, and I could tell that your story wouldn't have a happy ending. Excellent job. |
by Max
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Amazing poem I agree with Abed a lil punctuation would be cool in here |
by Decayed
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<sun's reflection> just add the apostrophe. |