Endless hearts ffffor this poem

Yearning for your dad. "Knowing" that is impossible doesn't mean your heart buys into what your mind has yet to fully accept. Now you yearn for the distance to put it into perspective or at least to put it behind you.
These orphans you see and the old man: you need to discover who they are & how to recover this city and the vision you once had of Damascus.

You my sweet, have poured your heart into a piece that needs to written... I want to jump through this lap top screen and hug you... !

No criticism needed indeed for this is beautiful, and sad and full of emotion, it is deep and raw and brought a tear to my eye.
And it always makes me annoyed when you put yourself down, because YOU are AMAZING and I just wish you would see this Noura, I wish you would just open your eyes and see what we see, a very talented and beautiful writer, with the whole world on her shoulders who turns that pain into something awesome...

Sending hugs all the way to Syria,

I love you, always...
xxxx
<3

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Lovely, sad poem.

I think the second "movement" is both the strongest and the simplest in its language. The heavy use of metaphors after the first "father" set up one tone for reading... and then it's like this artifice falls away in the second section. You suddenly drop some of the more ornate language, and what's left is immediate, vulnerable, laid-bare feeling that's effective in its purity.

This reminds me of your older poems. Gives me that same kind of nostalgia, same kind of sadness.
Lovely.

I have tears streaming down my face right now.....You and your poetry make an incredibly beautiful couple Noura.

Your strength still radiates even through this dark time. Stay strong hun, prayers and hugs your way.......

and just know I'd beat anyone who ever tries to change this write...so personal, so deep, its perfection is heartbreaking to read.

I forgot to tell you that I was writing two days ago , 'all roads lead to Valerie'.... and then I saw this :P .... it's like you knew about that... psycho!

There's no story. The name itself is a story. I mean it creates music in my ears that's inexplicable... I swear...!! I want to name my daughter Valerie.

As if sadness falls from your fingertips and absorbs everyone who comes across your poetry. You write like no one ever can, I always find myself chocking with my own tears when reading your sad pieces. Let it out sweetie, let is all out. Let us share your sadness with you so it might weigh a little bit less on your shoulders.

Always here for you whenever you need me.
Love you <3

xxx

Congrats for this win, darling.... Now please remove the footnote :D

Exactly what I was gonna say Abed ^^^

This was so deserving of a win, just believe in yourself!

Noura, there really are no words for this piece but truth. When reading this, my heart hurts, I feel some sort of numbness that only you are the one experiencing, but it IS nostalgia itself. This is true beauty, spoken with emotions you feel...

never give up and I believe you will always be a strong woman and a fighting poet. Congrats on the win! I'm so happy and proud of you.....Sorry for not commenting on this earlier :) Keep writing!

Poetry? poetry is.

That was beautiful......

U write gems.

"This is such a heartbreaking piece of writing and I was truly moved by this.

Noura, you pour your emotions out so beautifully throughout this and I could feel every ounce of pain you were describing. The longing you feel to have your father close to you once more really seeps through your written words and the imagery you portray throughout really allows the reader to both see and feel what you yourself are seeing and feeling.

The use of his voice turning into November rain and Winter having chattering teeth was something I found incredibly unique and bittersweet.

Vulnerability, pain and longing all ooze throughout this whole piece and you have managed to turn such a tragic and upsetting event into a wonderful piece of art.

Your love for your father is clearer than anything else in this and I hope within time your pain starts to ease."

:)