Comments : A Letter to Every Blind Heartbreaker

  • 9 years ago

    by La Reina De Corazones

    Hahahahaha i'm soo sorry sweetie but this poem was sooo good the very imagery and the emotions in there WOW blew me away! i normally don't like long poems they make me distracted heck mine are very short compared to others but the point is this: this poem made think of my first love and how i made a LONG letter like this one to him that i never emailed to him but i LOVE THIS POEM! it's going to be one my favorites my dear!!!! :)

    Queen Ash

  • 9 years ago

    by Khalid M Darwish

    Long but lovely poem! I like the ending "But thanks for the memories"
    Great.

  • 9 years ago

    by Ashdown

    I think that everyone can relate to it in someway; people change. I feel like this is written to people in general and not just one person, although you seem to be targeting one person in specific. I like this poem.

    And everything I strive to be
    Has nothing to do with you
    ^Out of all the lines, I think this is my favorite. It's so forward and powerful.

    I think the only thing I disliked about this was the form. Not completely, but it was a little hard to read because of the length and the way the form is set up that has no punctuation.
    I hope that doesn't sound harsh in anyway, just some friendly critique :)

  • 9 years ago

    by Amreen

    This is amazing. I could relate to this piece like tons. The repetition of the line acted so well for your poem and the various descriptions you gave my eyes tears.
    Thanks for sharing this piece.
    Well done(:

  • 9 years ago

    by L

    A long piece.. I know the repetition was important but since it's a long piece, it became too repetitive for me. Aside from that I have nothing else to critique. It was good and it show emotion as well as a nice attitude. That you no longer need this someone.

  • 9 years ago

    by CathyButterflyJC

    This was sooo amazing, and gave me the strength to know I ahve made the right decision in the past whcih somteimes I wonder why I got so far in as I did. thank you for submitting this poem, it has brightened my day, given me hhope for my very best friend, and I LOVE THIS POEM, great job, 100/100 100/100 100/100

  • 9 years ago

    by ArtistrySoul

    A very compelling poem, being hurt from the someone who was dear to you is not good. Use of excentric words to show your emotion in this piece bonds well with the moral of the poem.

    My only suggestion is to shorten the poem slightly, less is more :P

    Great work!!

  • 9 years ago

    by Tina

    Excellent!!! No more words!!! :')

  • 9 years ago

    by Let It Be

    So true power to ya girl