I am running out

by Arlyn Adame   Feb 21, 2013


I am running out "WHY!?"why cant i hug,love or have a simple touch of a hand to my shoulder? "why?"why cant i have a conversation were i pour my heart out to one single person?

i think of everything i say and try not to let something slip away."why?" and im afraid i am running out _running out of trust_the little i have left

i blind myself and cannot see who loves me?who trusts me?_"why?"why would they trust me if i cant trust myself enough to trust them. i am running out_or at least i try_try to run out_out of my past that encloses me

or maybe they should let me be_let me stop_let me decay in the emptiness that takes me over "every day I am running out "leaving my past "i will not ask WHY" not ask why im running but who im running for.

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  • 12 years ago

    by zombiepikachu

    This is a good start. There are so many grammar errors, however, it makes reading it very difficult. Also, try putting some figurative language in it, so that it won't be so simple. It'll be more interesting to read and it's meaning will be stronger. You have a good meaning, but, figurative language strengthens it -- add metaphors, imagery, and etc. right now it seems like someone ranting about life, which is fine, but it needs more emphasis.
    Keep writing! Good luck!
    -z

  • 12 years ago

    by Skyler

    Could stand some syntax and grammar fixes, but it carries a deep tone, and the last few words make this a solid poem. I recommend adapting stanza for flow, as it makes it easier to read and less like prose(non-poetry writing)

  • 12 years ago

    by End Of Eternity

    Good for start...keep writing

    all the best & take care

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