I'm not going to copy/paste the whole poem because it's quite long so..just highlighting part that were interesting to me...
The first stanza was a great way to open this up...it was full of imagery combined with lots of thoughts that keep you awake.
But why? I ask wearied pillows.
Absolutely brilliant line! Possibly the best in the whole poem (IMO anyway)
The next stanza I loved..there is so much going on here and the comparisons you use are just gobsmacking! The only world I had a little trouble with and..it's also your title is middestruction...I wonder if it should be mid-destruction..it just doesn't look right rolled into one word?
The next two stanzas I will admit I don't fully understand but...I will read them over and over until I do...believe me I will because your poetry always intrigues me and....I'm pretty sure it's just me having a dumb moment right now.
Hellon, you're right, it needs a hyphen. I'll change it right away.
It is quite confusing, but if it helps, the beginning and ending sort of connects. Or at least I tried to. The middle's more on similes/metaphors, a bit of expansion.
Also, the western/west wind is considered the calmest or mildest wind. I thought it embodied a certain person I know quite well.
8 years ago
by Wicked Ways
And I only wish I could rest as peacefully
as she does, one day. But not as calm. No.
I absolutely love the entire poem and that ending is a perfect one. ended it really well. . . You went really deep with this poem expressing emotions and thoughts so nicely. . . its no wonder why this poem won. Nice work :)
"This poem clearly shows that the author has great narrative skills. I am a little bit flabbergasted to spot such typically classic, mythological imagery intertwined with quite modern, every-day imagery ... and it didn't bother me at all, even though it was quite clear. Maybe it's because the language/style remained quite steady throughout the poem. I could easily lose myself into this poem simply because of its interesting language and descriptions, while easily forgiving the fact that it's quite a cryptic write. Maybe because, with these kind of writes, one doesn't necessarily have to feel the meaning, but rather the atmosphere. And I also enjoy it when poets take advantage of structure to set a pace, which was the case at the end of this poem. Interesting write."
There is nothing in the world better for the reader than being able to not just see what the author has written, but live it and know its presence. The character's perspective and voice has such a vivid presence here, it grabs me immediately and these verses hold a depth I still don't think I may ever understand. Of course the personification of the "western wind" is brilliant to start off with, and "coming back" makes me wonder if the character wanted to escape a situation and return, or if he/she was forced to. Now, I'm led to believe this person was in a sense charmed, told on and on by figures unnamed that she is capapble and can so powerfully calm hearts, even the most wild ones.... The whole thought process the character goes through reflects onto the reader, and now I am asking too, why? But it is almost a twist in my mind with this line "Why should hearts soften and their beating calmed down?" Like why does there need to be that intervention? You cannot change man's character and how his heart was formed. The atmosphere gives me shiver, as if some part of my skin itself is vulnerable, open. I loved the ending lines, dreaming of her finally in all of her peace and wanting to sleep that way too.... but not wanting to be as calm as her. Maybe the character doesn't want to live in a world where emotions are calmed, not experience the anger and sometimes venting humans go through.... A very dark, fascinating piece full of curiosity. Enjoyed this greatly!