Comments : Their Story

  • 9 years ago

    by Blood of a Lion

    Its cute in its way. Like a fleshed out epitome for a desire in love.
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    She swept into the room,
    the epitome of grace.
    People all entranced,
    by the beauty in her face.
    ^^^
    The beauty of one face or even a smile, a smile could be described as the epitome of beauty it shows what's on the inside. Along with the stirring of the room entranced by the beauty which engages a boy.
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    I don't know how to put my words into use but its good. 5/5

  • 9 years ago

    by Rebecca Bentley

    Brill! I love it 5/5

  • 9 years ago

    by Robert Gardiner

    Very Nice!!!!

  • 9 years ago

    by White Orchid

    I lovec this! Very well written. And i love the pride and prejudice type feel of this and how it flows as a poem but is like a short story. Well done!! :)

  • 9 years ago

    by Ingrid

    I like this poem, it rhymes in an unforced way, it has a story and it is worded well and with care.

    Well done, TM and welcome to our club:)

    5/5 Ingrid

  • 9 years ago

    by xXxMidnight SoulxXx

    Awwwwww!!!! this made me want to cry!! i mean this is the absolute meaning of love how it has to conquor both your fears and shyness to try to get the person you most desire...also this is what i would want one day lol but for me it would be for a girl sorry lol either way it's SUPER cute! :) 5/5

    Queen Of Me

  • 9 years ago

    by Malachi

    Wow this is super adorable ^^ great job!