Glittering Galaxies

I love your alliteration 'glittering galaxies'! Especially for a friendship poem, it sounds beautiful and can't wait to see what you came up with.

First stanza was great! The mentioning of the frosty peaks & such made me definitely think of Jenni since her name on here before this was LilMissFrosty..so I can definitely see her hidden beneath these words! I love the overwhelming emotion, how you're seeing light again & gaining freedom. I love how you speak of this new time as a 'new era' for it's like an entirely different time in your life.

I'm beginning to realize.. 'It could have been noone...but you' do you mean noone or anybody? Anybody sounds much better but, maybe you do mean noone. Entirely up to you! Anybody does sound more grammatically correct, however :)

I see you used quite a bit of repetition in this, with the eagle, freedom & new era. I feel they work great together. Though repetitive I suppose it's beneficial that you spoke of it each time a little differently so you weren't literally saying the same thing over again.

Of course I know who you're speaking of, & I wish you both the best friendship ever. You both deserve to be happy! Lovely dedication to someone so deserving.

Well he is a douche...A great big douche. Hahaha

Lol, I just burst out laughing at the first thing Jenni had to say in her comment! Of course =)

This is such an awesome dedication and I'm touched just reading it! I love all the references between you two. The inspiration and spirit in this poem is phenomenal, and I don't think anyone could have said these words more passionately.

"as we were looking down through every river, desert and valley, carefreely speaking in freedom from the top of the world, like true explorers set for trips among the stars."
- that was one of my favorite parts! It reminds me of the journey of life.... how every step is an adventure, but it doesn't have to be one we take alone.

You BOTH are such loyal people, from the start of meeting you I could tell, and not only are you fun-loving but understanding. You don't leave because of one thing said or a hardship in life, you get through it, make it out alright.

So beautiful! Take care :]

Ohhh where to start.

Well firstly...you're a douche. Hahaha.

Seriously...this is amazing, as you already know it brought me to tears...words can never describe how much I love this or how much I appreciate it.

" flying in circles and in triangles "
"snowy frosty "

:) I love these lines for obvious reasons, and I love how you managed to incorporate something personal to both of us without losing the overall flow of the whole thing.

"It could have been noone ... but you,
and I'm thankful it is you"

I love you. Don't ever forget that. And I'm thankful too and feel the same way. As I've said over and over-you are amazing. You're an incredible person and don't let anyone make you feel differently. Don't let a particular person make you feel differently, you don't deserve that and you are so much better than that. And him. And I'm going to keep telling you that until you both believe it and start feeling better about it.

"exhausted from the voyage of life, our white winged mate is waiting."

As I just said...you're amazing, and I know you can overcome this. You WILL overcome this. You know, one of my favourite Buffy quotes is "When things are bad I always think...what would Buffy do?" I changed that recently to "What would Stefano do?"

Because you are hands down the most incredible, loyal, intelligent, reliable and compassionate person I know. And I am so thankful to have met you, I really am. (I wanted to say rational but then realized that's only after three hours after arguing..lmao)

I just..afkghakd. I love this. So, so much. It means so much to me.

Now I'm past the emotional reaction, I'll move onto the literacy aspect.
As you know, I like to modify and edit and offer suggestion after suggestion...hahahaha.

But really, what can I say in terms of that this time? Nothing. This is a beautiful piece of writing. I am so glad that I pestered you for the original collaboration because even though you have said yourself not being a native speaker may hold you back in writing...I don't think it does. I think you have a lot of potential regarding writing, which is why I told you earlier you should keep writing/write more often.

*Edit. Actually I have a suggestion. Pick a more interesting title. :)...there we go. That's much better. Good boy. Lmao

Nominated. (Well it will be when you change the category for two minutes so that I can do :)...yeah you had to put it in funny for kids didn't you..Jerk. )

And not because it's about me either lmao. But because I think this is such a beautiful piece of prose.