Fantasizing Daydream

People being free to speak truth,
Without a care just like the youth.

*.* I am so in love with those 2 lines!

Amazing as always..

This is quite an interesting poem. I like the way added four lines in each stanza. You are a very talented lad. Nice work. 5/5

As a writer, you have painted a picture, to persons reading this. Allowing them to imagine with you, daydreaming with you as it flows.
Giving them something to recreate the idea of what world without lies would be like,
where everyone would be happy, confident not worrying what other might think of or say when they see him/her doing things which in reality might be perceived as crazy.....

I like the ending, the last two lines.

But the real world really can be great,
If you just don't mind a little wait.

It gave me a sense of imagination, what the world would be like if only everyone could take time to think a little longer before rushing to do what is not right, maybe they would be a chance to change up his/her mind and do the right thing, Then this world would be heavenly clone, where being happy wouldn't fall in the category of "optional" but "must".

Good work.

Learning as we get older, in youth we are confidant and almost brash like. Aspects of this poem were great because it is like you were showing us what you really did day dream when you wrote this poem. The double view point is wonderful, the happiness in the day dream itself and the realization that you are not in that dream anymore. The happiness you wrote about seems to come from your youth which makes me think that you miss it or never really had a childhood. But the emotions you show coming out of it is great, because you were confused and didn't know where you were for a second and the scream is great because you can visualize the spider and the scream that comes with it. Well crafted poem

I like it but way to short.