Comments : Don't love me, baby

  • 8 years ago

    by angel plant

    This is full of desire, love, passion, romance, and it it is hot. I enjoyed it.

  • 8 years ago

    by Saerelune

    You're becoming brilliant with these vulnerable yet blunt/rough pieces of yours. Looking forward to seeing you perform this on stage, on a day. You've got the style!

  • 8 years ago

    by The Queen

    I agree with Cynnie. Such a powerful piece!

  • 8 years ago

    by Abed

    I'm amazed.
    Love it.

  • 8 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Ah Yaki, there is not much to say after reading this because it leaves me speechless! Agree with what everyone else has already said, there is vulnerability here and you address emotions that are surreal, from expressing that this love is temporary, that you will not be taken home. I also liked how you made the notes of how you will be like a work of art, "made", and also with the metaphor of the chapter too and not being able to stay forever.

    Congratulations on the win!!! So well-deserved and such emotions are told here. What I always appreciate about your poetry is the reality, and here, maybe the reality of this love.

  • 8 years ago

    by Karla

    Glad you are back. Fabulous piece!

  • 6 years ago

    by -Choke-On-MY-Halo-

    I had to save this poem under my favorites because not only is it relatable it's beautiful to read, it almost had me crying since that's the type of woman I was before.

    This sounds like it's describing a mistress and not the wife, or even maybe a one night stand. It's visual, emotional and if this was a book I wouldn't want to let go of it for a moment it was that good! 5/5

    - Moria Bella Knight -