Autumn Sky

by NightFlyer   Oct 22, 2013


Sapphire blue and cirrus white
Silver smile of bright moonlight
Leads me down where spirits meet
All along this silent street
Fleecy clouds that glow on high
Brighten up the midnight sky
Haunted cries and past life streams
Fill this windy realm of dreams
Stranded now on ghostly lanes
To far hills and astral plains
Blue moon shines her mystery
In her light, I know I'm free
Spellbound, I behold her rise
Opal of the crystal skies
Fills the night, her jasmine kiss
Starlit boulevards of bliss
Autumn sky, my mind, you've raised
To your heights, I drift, amazed.

by Night Flyer (c) 2013
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  • 10 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    Judging comment:

    This is a really rhythmical poem and its very good rhythm perfectly matches the constantly changing images reflecting the bliss of what the autumn sky represents for the poet. I really like the idea of bliss that you were able to convey and some of the words you've used are amazing. What strikes me in this case is the vivid imagery you have created, it is like a continuous flow of images and the atmosphere that they convey is simply amazing. I also have to give you credit on the fact that you have also made it rhyme, so congratulations to you. On the other side of things it feels like the rhyming has somewhat limited you. I can see you have got some great skill from this poem, just the extremely vivid and poetic imagery that you have created along with the rhythm (and the syllables) is something that is difficult to put together, as often the rhyming can end up cliche, so when I say that rhyming limited you it wasn't intended as a criticism. I think that putting this together isn't really easy at all and perhaps you have been too ambitious, which is good anyway as that always leads to further improvement. In any case, well done.

  • 10 years ago

    by End Of Eternity

    Congrats on the HM dear friend...really loved it. So soothing & rhyming so nicely...simply awesome.

    all the best & take care

  • 10 years ago

    by Jyoti Rawat

    It is fully rhythmic. I like it.

  • 10 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    Autumn is a lovely season, colorful too my favorite. I like the picture you have painted of autumn. The feel of loneliness yet there is also
    peace..a peace one can sigh. Love the smoothness of this read..beautiful as always!