I wish it didnt end so soon, its one of these poems that you find yourself lost within it. It really deserved the frontpage mention!

Keep it up :)

I am speechless.

Its a poem that takes the reader along into a world where the writer is swimming in, making the reader feel and see what the writer feels.

Liked the flow and the way it unfolds...Congrats on the win.

One thing I'm not sure of.. "there's fleas" and "there's beasts", I think it would sound better if you said, "there are...". Maybe it's just me. =\

Besides that, there is so much going on in this piece. Just the different scenes you present and the way you make it all flow together so perfectly. It feels personal, something only for you to understand. A well-deserved win.

The title is correct. This is Erroticism (even in your misspelling of the word).

Hard to read, disconnected, and leads the reader down a dead end and makes one feel like the next dirty trick is of being mugged for reading this.

Please do prose with breath breaks, meaning, and make one grateful that they were allowed to read you great and innermost thoughts.

And, thanks for your contribution.

~Magnificent!