Daydreaming

Great write, very sweet wistful poem. I enjoyed it a lot.

I enjoyed this write. It's a very sweet poem. I always favoured this style of writing and I feel that you did well with it.

In regards to the style, I noticed two things with this particular piece.

First;
In that far off distant place
I watch the smile come across your face

The syllables throughout are generally lower in count, except for this set. Line 10 is longer than the rest, slightly breaking the flow. If I could make a suggestion, perhaps this;

"I watch a smile cross your face."

Unless your referring to a specific smile of this person, then the reference of "the smile" would be the way to remain, though I'm not sure how you could lower the count keeping that part.

Second;
"Is it just fantasy
Like something from a dream"

Everything else in the poem rhymes, but I'm not finding the connection in this set.

Prior to lines 13 and 14, you have rhymed lines 11 and 12 with "seems" and "me" which fits great, but I would says that "seems" rhymes better with "dream" and "fantasy" with "me".

My suggestion in this case, is not to change the wording, but change the line placement if it can still fit and get the message across. In my head, it fits smoothly like so;

Magical...so it seems
Like something from a dream
Us together...you and me
Is it just fantasy

Either way though, if you care not for any of that, than so be it lol. The read is great either way and I like it. That's really the most important part. If you're happy with it, change nothing!!

Thanks for the read!!