Scars

This girl sounds like she feel alone in a crowded room she sounds like all she wants to be is loved and have some one care about her and if she needs that I can help her with that if she wants

Dang I wanted to cry really bad Dom this is painful to read yet at the same time it gives me an insight on what you went through your small life I'm not that much older yet I do not for a second wish I had been raised like you were *hugs*I love you Dom never forget you will always have me there for you when I can be there

-Onyx

Abuse is awful especially during childhood we pretty much don't have a choice. As we get older we deal with the pain in many different ways, some become cutters. To them its a good feeling, it does not even hurt, Great write

First stanza- I really liked how you started the poem out. It's a very nice build up for the rest of the poem here. The imagery is very sad but I think that was what you were trying to go for. You don't really know how you cut so it leaves a vague feeling. It does make you want to keep reading though which is always great. Ut made me want to find out why this person cuts and how their life is so sad. It seems like you are saying that happiness is a lie and darkness has become such a part that it's normal.

Second stanza- This is your best stanza I feel because it's the main plot of the poem because you are talking about why you cut. I love here how you didn't hold anything back. In this stanza 4. You say crimes "he committed" do you mean your father or some other guy that hurt you? You should detail that more because ot could be confusing to the reader. Anyway there is so much sadness here. You give the reader a feeling that they want to save you and feel your pain. It's very relatable.

Third stanza- You bring us back to reality with the present. Your imagery is great here too because you show how much blood is flowing down the arm which is a lot because the cause of death is the cuts. Anyways you did a great job with connecting the story together and the title is perfect. This is one of my favorite from you. Great write